No longer me

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MavenX
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No longer me

Post by MavenX » Fri May 10, 2019 7:13 pm

Im starting to get pissed/
I want to twist my glass but dont have shit to put in that bitch/
Im feeling explosive, soul corroded/
I fake my conversations/
Causing bodily abbrasions because Im self hated/
Why do I still write, I no longer care about exposure/
Just going through the motions like a brain washed soldier/
I havent been me for a while, you should know what youve seen has been a show, ask for me tomorrow and you may just find my ghost/
But really and truly to the most, I wont, this life is torture, and I wanna see how this goes/
I know that right now my life is just in a nose dive and Im just along for the ride/
Every time I try to grab the stick and pull up, life proves it has a bigger dick and gives me a cruel fuck/
But I know this is not it, just have to stay focused and pointed towards my purpose

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Re: No longer me

Post by NoVeL » Sat May 11, 2019 9:07 am

Causing bodily abbrasions because Im self hated/
Why do I still write, I no longer care about exposure/
Just going through the motions like a brain washed soldier/

Captivating. It truly had my attention out of the entire drop. Shows potential at a story telling depth with great magnitude.
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Re: No longer me

Post by MavenX » Sat May 11, 2019 3:02 pm

I've written stories my whole life. Just recently started writing rhymes

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Re: No longer me

Post by Realm » Wed May 22, 2019 2:48 pm

The rhymes we're lackluster to me but that likely isn't the focus. There seemed to be a good sense of emotion. Definitely a relatable subject for many and bits and pieces illustrated images. Sounds like it was off the top and I can respect that. There's more power and captivation in a story from the soul than a pack of good rhymes. Although piecing a nice rhyme scheme to a short story like this would be next to flawless.

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