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5 Votes Win (3-0 is KO, 4-1 is TKO)

Voting Catagories
Flow-
Creativity -
Vocabulary -
Storytelling -

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Write 7 Bars on the following....

...your a Spartan Warrior during the Battle of Thermopylae. Detail the 3 day battle and your death as the Persians attack.

Goodluck...

Check . . .

check, if ive been granted the win against kuhlerblynd then update my profile plz,

i'm gonna have to request an extension like all these other bitch asses,,,,,notttttt

i'll be droppin shortly.


DROPPED !!!

CBK

[(We marched, into hell we marched,well armed, our 3 hundred spartan hardened hearts, armoured from the start,
since birth we trained in arms, an weapons practice, how to tame pain, remain calm, never panic an defensive tactics.
the strength to deliver extensive damage,an preventing hazards,service to Sparta in life or death is the only existing thing that ever mattered)].



"We set formation at the head of the pass an witnessed the dreaded at last,steadfast, not a shred of a gasp, a million men had amassed there,then as it crept up our backs together we erupted in laughter.never retreat never surrender spartan code is forever remembered, as the million descended not a single fearful word was mentioned from us 300 herculean descendants.
3 days We fight, not ceasing to sleep,no peace to eat, nor even to drink,
staring right into the eyes of defeat himself an daring the demon of eden to blink,
hearing the heathens weep,whilst we leave them in heaps,is relieving fatigue,were feeling relieved as they flee in a reeling retreat,our cheering, their cries,appearances are deceiving but best believe thats fear im seeing in their eyes,
but i fear its a fear that will soon disappear an subside,but if we are on lucks side we might just survive this tough fight its been a rough fight.

day break,they attack in force, we push back of course,hacked an sawn,battle worn, after all, we've been fast at war since the crack of dawn, then the action stalls,a dramatic pause,they pull back in scores as we're still stabbing corpses and the remorse that they were askin for gallopped off with their horses.
we stand with heads back steadfast,red splashed from the bloodshed of the dead stacked,trying to catch the breath that our chests lack, next task, tighten my leg straps whilst this rest lasts.
before they blotted out the narrow pass with arrow shafts we were slaughtering them
300 versus one million, and we aborted more than a quarter of em.
so all i can tell to you express or explain to you
is that we did what we were born to do,what we were bred to do an what we were trained to do".


___________________________VS____________________________


Kau the Lion

Mine is a story that will surely be etched in history. A testimony to Spartan mettle.
Their party members part remembered. They wielded shields of heart and metal.
That stark September when logic said retreat, Leonidas vowed to instead proceed.
Vexed when Xerxes threaten the peace, they resolved to all leave dead or free.
Merely numbered a sheer three hundred, to lead and fight in the name of peace.
Tempers flared as the Spartans dared to unleash Hell at “The Hot Gates” of Greece.
Every Greek soldier young and old, combined still outnumbered a hundred fold.
But their spirit! That was something bold. They stood firm, their ground, as the summer closed.
The Persian forces were forced through a certain course during the perfect storm.
Performing poorly on foreign soil; a fraction of their mass would have them hurt and torn.
For these were warriors cast in the image of gods, able to upset significant odds.
Downfall, however, loomed in the distance since the day I was cast away, twisted and flawed.
Yes, I, Ephialtēs, showed the invaders, the knack to defeat them, a crack in the defense.
A simple goat path which had let them go past and flank the last stand of bastard elitists.
They should've known that I'd have my revenge. Glad to be friends, they trashed me instead.
As far as I'm concerned they got what they deserved. I brought their prejudice act to an end.
I knew I was destined for something more. An idea I realized and underscored.
In the end, however, I felt my own sword. Though Greece lost the battle they won the war.
I escaped the fate of the ones I betrayed, but never saw pay for the effort I thwarted.
Ten years I ran from the bounty on this man. T'was not me but my killer rewarded.

Voting Catagories
Flow- KAU - Very close ... Kau had some bars that flowed rediculous with multiple rhymeing multies and everything. hoever some bars sort of fell off in comparison. CBK Try to simplify your flow a bit, and make it more consistant throughout the whole piece. Complex flows are ILL but when you eventually fall off the pattern, its a very noticible decline in your flow. KAU GETS THIS BY A HAIR

Creativity - CBK - I'm going to have to go with CBK, i liked the position you took and the way you told your story. Kaus was very good but i bit more basic/typical in stucture. CBK

Vocabulary - TIE - plain and simple, ya both did yah thang

Storytelling - CBK - the prespective you took CBK was nice. very creative and allmost made me feel like i was there. Now Kau's was allways well put together and told nicely but i think CBK just edged this cat.


Overall: CBK

I amm officially becoming a fan of TOPICAL BATTLES. DOPPPPPPPPPPE Read fellaz!


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Kau The Lions verse has been updated.

Quix, please make proper adjustments to your vote if any are required. Until further notification, score is still 0-0.

Mod/Admin, please clean this thread, delete convos and this post AFTER Quix updates.


- I Apologize for the troubles.

Flow
- CBK, the use of multies made it easier to catch the flow
Creativity
- CBK, the way he brought his idea in the text was really good
Vocabulary
- CBK, his use of words made his verse very interesting
Storytelling
- Kau, he had a structured verse, and had a beginning, middle and end

MVGT - CBK

In my opinion ... I think that CBK won. Bet you didn't think that would happen now, did ya? I know I didn't ... Just kidding ... But on a serious note, his verse was solid all round. Kau's verse was also good, however the main factors were flow and description, both of which were displayed better by CBK despite not setting it up like Kau's verse. He presented his story very clearly while CBK's lines were all over. However in terms of the use of vocabuaries, description and flow ...

MVGT Comeback Kid

Quix, confirm your vote after adjustments were made.


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Vote Up Beeches

Structure: Kau
Fluidity: Kau
Multies: Tie (edging towards Kau)
Topic: Tie (edging towards CBK)
Creativity: CBK
Use Of Vocab: CBK

I have absolutely no idea which one of these i like more, and that's 100% honest.
CBK had a good switch on things, had fresh ideas, made situations happen and use the vocab nicely
only thing was the stretching of the verse and less of the flow
where as Kau had good flow, good structure and a nice overal feel of the verse
but the vocab was a bit plain in places and i wouldnt say predictable.. but not as imaginative
ALTHOUGH with that said, Kau's piece was literally like Poetry, and i dig that type of topical style
so i don't mean to be a S.O.B but

I'm gonna have to vote a tie, +1 to both

i stick to my vote

2-1 uppin...

Creativity:cbk
Flow:tie
Storytelling:kau
Vocabulary:cbk

By a hair MVGT: CBK

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3-1 uppin