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Defiance vs Arvincible (Quarter-Finals)

Posted: Wed Aug 10, 2011 11:33 pm
by Ambiguous Realm
Due 72 hours(3 days) from time of this thread
First to 5 votes (3-0=ko/4-1=tko). Each day late is 1 against you
Voting must use categories with brief explanations.

Categories
-Storytelling
-Flow
-Creativity
-Rhyme scheme
-Metaphors & Similes
-Consistency
-Impact


Topic: Who am i?

Re: Defiance vs Arvincible (Quarter-Finals)

Posted: Thu Aug 11, 2011 12:28 am
by Defiance
hummm good topic..


Check

14 lines right?

Re: Defiance vs Arvincible (Quarter-Finals)

Posted: Thu Aug 11, 2011 12:44 am
by Arvincible
check your face

Re: Defiance vs Arvincible (Quarter-Finals)

Posted: Sat Aug 13, 2011 3:46 am
by Defiance
Who am I, shit im still trying to figure that-out
A troubled young mind followed by rain an black-clouds
not prone to tap-out. yet I always put myself in those-positions
a rapper slash criminal climbing out the holes-im-diggin
I talk out loud but no-one-listens in need of help but I don’t-ask
A probationee, weed smoking, drug addict with no-class
Always Broke with no-cash.. I act hardened but inside-I’m-scared
Of this fucked life but these drugs get me too high-to-care
I wake with night-mares sweating all my bad-decisions
I Fight myself at every turn closing my eyes to saddened-visions
stomach turns with gastric-fissions when I reflect on what-I’ve-done
36 charges committed as a youth I’m my mom’s fucked-up-son
So who am I? I’m Noah Armstrong AkA Modern-Defiance
Stubborn-an-violent but im smiling because of what-I’ll-Become

Re: Defiance vs Arvincible (Quarter-Finals)

Posted: Sat Aug 13, 2011 4:27 am
by Arvincible
I am...

Inconsistent yet constant..I'm never contained, unfixed.. never the same
Subject to perpetual change, fire in my eyes, heart filled with ember n flame..
Just remember the name, legend is my destiny but its really got the best of me
That ur perception matters.. my imperfections scatter, as part of my complexities
The nature of my tendencies..let's take time to introspect, inside of my identity
no disrespect despite of all my enemies..so instead im using kindness as my weaponry
Born into mediocrity, i see it as God tryna talk-to-me, that I have to withstand..
Not take lightly what he's-offered-me, cuz from poverty my success is more than chance
Hit most extremes in my life, now I'm mentality strong cuz i dont choose-to-pretend,
Dont get confused-cuz-ive-went to have nothing then have it all just to lose-it-again
I may be bruised-with-some-dents, cuts-stinging..yet I still take pride in my up-bringing
Mother showed me how to be a man of value, just-being strong willed held enough-meaning
So for me its tough-seeing myself havin no voice-in-a-silence, bein understood-is-the-science
While my presence is viewed as a cleaner demeanor, fuck being meaner I see no good-in-defiance..

Re: Defiance vs Arvincible (Quarter-Finals)

Posted: Sat Aug 13, 2011 4:58 am
by AntiMaTTer
LMFAO@the "I am" poem shit... i did that in highschool, a topic our teacher gave us to write for poetry... bahaha wtf

Re: Defiance vs Arvincible (Quarter-Finals)

Posted: Sat Aug 13, 2011 5:17 am
by Sir Kevin O Shea
Storytelling:Arv
Flow:Defiance
Creativity:Arv
Rhyme scheme:Arv
Metaphors & Similes:Arv
Consistency:Arv
Impact:Arv

Vote: Arv.

Defiance, that wasn't a bad verse but I expected better from you. I feel like Arv really took better advantage of the topic.

Re: Defiance vs Arvincible (Quarter-Finals)

Posted: Sat Aug 13, 2011 6:08 am
by 88SkyLink
Storytelling - Defiance's verse sounded more narrative than Arvincible, so Defiance gets it for me

Flow - TIE, both of the verses weren't very stretched, and they both flowed well

Creativity - Arvincible's verse was more complex, while Defiances seemed basic, so ARV

Rhyme scheme - As I said, the complexity of Arv's verse made his rhyme scheme alot stronger, plus the multies were nice from Arvincible, so he gets this catecogry

Metaphors & Similes - I don't think there was any used...

Consistency - Arv again, he stared and ended stronger than defiance

Impact - Arvincible's verse really stood out for me, especially the last line lol

All in all, it was a good battle. Defiance done nothing wrong with his verse, it's just the verse as a whole was cliché, there was less originality than Arv's verse, it seemed that he knew what to do and took it as an advantage..Unlucky Defiance, but..

MVGT - Arvincible

Re: Defiance vs Arvincible (Quarter-Finals)

Posted: Tue Aug 16, 2011 2:58 am
by Ambiguous Realm
arv wins by k.o.

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