Enlightend vs Kuhlerblynd (Quarter-Finals)

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Enlightend vs Kuhlerblynd (Quarter-Finals)

Post by The Architect » Wed Aug 10, 2011 11:26 pm

Rules
8 Bars/16 lines (MAX)
Due 72 hours(3 days) from time of this thread
First to 5 votes (3-0=ko/4-1=tko). Each day late is 1 against you
Voting must use categories with brief explanations.

Categories
-Storytelling
-Flow
-Creativity
-Rhyme scheme
-Metaphors & Similes
-Consistency
-Impact


Topic: Life in a wheelchair
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Re: Enlightend vs Kuhlerblynd (Quarter-Finals)

Post by Enlightend » Fri Aug 12, 2011 6:49 am

OK what Ur about to read is morbid as hell, an even if u never cry surely u will
and would you drop a few tears for me as well... now i have a story to tell...
so lets begin, my name is Greg i was the first of two, a set of twins
my brother James was faced with emptiness below his waist instead of limbs
he grew up envisioning a different life, but felt his chair imprisoned him
i watched his struggles and when he would cry i would try and listen in
but he felt so distant then, mixing Vicodin an Adapin while sipping gin
his disfigurement left him gripped with sin, it had all but diminished Jim
he blamed god, our parents, then me.. he called it envy when he spewed my name
he said "its you i blame.. cause I'm the one who has to go through the pain"
i felt helpless, sick, i could only look and hear... but i couldn't help with this
an as he took his life my pity fades an i became enraged by all his selfishness
he was 53 and i listened to so many of his "pity me"s and "look at my fight"s
i wanted god to justify why my brother lived for hatred as i was denied life
see i was born an empty shell, a helpless form never blessed with real tears
It just doesn't feel fair i would of gave anything to LIVE even life in a wheelchair
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Re: Enlightend vs Kuhlerblynd (Quarter-Finals)

Post by The Architect » Tue Aug 16, 2011 3:03 am

win by no show

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