Topical Battle Royale Preliminary

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Who's piece was better?

Poll ended at Fri Jul 29, 2011 5:53 pm

Deception
0
No votes
Shazo
3
43%
Catastropic
1
14%
- Calico -
0
No votes
Baron Enders
0
No votes
3rd String QB
3
43%
 
Total votes: 7

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Topical Battle Royale Preliminary

Post by The Architect » Fri Jul 22, 2011 3:22 am

5 Bars/10 lines
Due Date - 48 hours from NOW

Categories
-Storytelling (How well you tell the story)
-Flow (Smooth delivery)
-Creativity (Thinking outside the box)
-Rhyme scheme (How complex your rhyming is)
-Metaphors & Similes (Obvious category)
-Consistency (All categories included + How well you stay on topic)
-Impact (How epic and powerful your story is)

1 Winner will be decided (and awarded in record)
Losing will not effect your record
No showing will effect your record and terminate you from the tournament

Participants
Omnie
AntiMatter
Deception
Shazo
Catastropic
OMG St33Z
- Calico -
Baron Enders
3rd String QB



TOPIC IS - Surviving death by...

Your choices : (freezing, burning, drowning, falling, stabbed, shot, lethal injection, suffocating, starving, force fed, strangled, crushed, electrocuted)


DO NOT CHECK IN, just DROP YOUR VERSE
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Re: Topical Battle Royal Preliminary

Post by Sir Kevin O Shea » Fri Jul 22, 2011 5:27 am

Potassium solutions as answers to my criminal selections in question
after a last meal and undressing im tied down as they reveal the final lesson
I found a form of protection, by eating iron chips off of the penitentiary bars
the consumption of metal shards manipulates my genetical code symmetry parts
laying clinically scarred from a medical syringe piercing my layers of muscle
as the secretions of diabolical substances enter, I pretend to struggle
I close my eyes, using body techniques to control my perceived vital signs
nurses note taking statistics while im relieved knowing survivals mine
finally as the autopsy procedure began with green scrubs with scalpels in hand
until I zombie strolled to scare them off as I walked out to the van
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Calico

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Shazo

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Re: Topical Battle Royal Preliminary

Post by Enders » Fri Jul 22, 2011 7:14 am

Dammit im damned, famished by man, ill get to the end, with a mallet in hand!
needles transmit the plans, but in transit it lands, in a faggits ass glands!!- LMFAO

A swift kick to my host, im out of the clench, a series of shots, cloud up and stench
i make like a ghost, coast out to quench, my freedom like thirst, 1st off THE BENCH<- 3rd!!!

i sprinith forth thy horizonith, the distance falls short, im blind as shit
if i wasnt starving i wouldnt mind a bit, but the darks suffacating, and freezing tits

quickly i start a fire to survive a bit, i look to my side where a knife had hit
bleeding internally? maybe... i grab a splint, wrap it around, with a stick and flynt

Im tired, bored, and ready to die, ive felt hell passionately within this flight
Ive survived this long, fucked its design, its wrong to give up, atleast not tonight



Boom Shakalaka, I'M IN THERE LIKE SWIMWEAR
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Re: Topical Battle Royale Preliminary

Post by Shazo » Fri Jul 22, 2011 9:08 am

Longing for air, my minds racing, my chest's aching
One moment's a headache, but the next can be breath taking
Panicing as I struggle to escape the grasp of this person
Struggling in this pool of emotions I've been submerged in
A mix of feeling pissed and pitiful, wrong and miserable
I think its all ending soon, white light fills my visual
I'm blacking it out, I'm thinking its over, I'm finished
Never was a time that I've felt so hopeless and defenseless
Hope flashed,the person eased her grip, now I think I'm making it
She stopped suffocating,and let the life back in our relationship.

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Re: Topical Battle Royale Preliminary

Post by Deception » Fri Jul 22, 2011 9:30 am

Through wicked times came my pain, one to scorch souls
A burn uncompromised by the rain drops spitting in horse blows
If I knew then what I know now, id be better in disguise
Wouldn't let them take me to genocide for like Anne I'd hide
Never too be found, off the radar, special forces wouldn't find me
For being bound, encased a burned at the stake leave lights to blind me
As flames rip through flesh like talons of the devil breaths hate Inside my carcass
For this murderous thing is my fault ain't a prayer can save me not even the hardest


Sorry bout quality I didnt have time to write just a five min key saves the notch on my l pile if I show

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Re: Topical Battle Royale Preliminary

Post by Catastropic » Fri Jul 22, 2011 2:44 pm

O'shit, Cata got hit
electrocuted frozed quick

my body frozen' lethal injectionz to my neck
Cata's brain still at its functionz, forced fed

Still seein light at tha end of my tunnel
dark moon' screaming angelz of death still coming

lord' help a brah!
my internal organz fillz of fire

O'SHIT Cata, finally escapes hell
wokeup masterbating, to XXX.BlackTail.

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Re: Topical Battle Royale Preliminary

Post by - Calico - » Sat Jul 23, 2011 2:38 am

Man im feeling great…this really has to be my lucky Break,
Really getting late…the guards sleep and forgot to close the gate.

I hear cheers from my Comrades as I escape the prison walls,
Got to the Fence…climbed over then a Shot forced me into a fall.

Shot in the Arm hard to swim my Bloody water let off a crimson glow,
Guards released the dogs and an undercurrent really wouldn’t let Me go.

“If only I can get to the ~other side~…my Homies awaiting with his ~Mother’s Ride~”
I felt myself losing Hope…Dead Man’s Float for escapees this is where those ~others died~

Next thing I know im face down on the Bank…..The guards seemed to have lost Me,
So exhausted, my Dude gets me in the car and we ride the escape nearly cost Me.
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Re: Topical Battle Royale Preliminary

Post by The Architect » Sun Jul 24, 2011 3:43 am

Storytelling:3rd String QB
Flow:Shazo
Creativity:Shazo
Rhyme scheme: Baron Enders
Metas/Sims:Baron Enders
Consistency:3rd String QB
Impact:Shazo

Vote: Shazo

i'd say runner up was 3rd String, everyone else had some decent qualities but i think shazo brought a new approach for suffocation, 3rd's lethal injection was the most consistent and with details painted a more in-depth story,

all those who dropped qualify for the tournament, once a winner is chosen here we will continue onto the first round of the tournament
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Re: Topical Battle Royale Preliminary

Post by Alvin » Sun Jul 24, 2011 3:34 pm

Honestly everyone did pretty well for themselves. IMO the winner of this round is 3rd String QB.

3rd. You have an amazing writing style, and considering you dont spend too much time on writing for topicals, makes you that much bigger of a threat. I enjoyed everything really.

Shazo, your story was impressive as well. Good shit on joining this tournament, and showing. The ONLY thing i think would benefit you in the future battles is your rhyme scheme. Up some rhymes and youd be pretty damn good honestly.

Dcep, where you been man? Nice to see you writing it up. SPEND MROE TIME WRITING FOOL. Just polish that flow man. SPEND MORE TIME lol

Catastropic, Use more words man, the more words you write the more detail you are getting across to me(The Reader). Just because something is bold doesn't make it good or right. Add more substance, look at your piece in comparison to any of the others, and drop more when it counts man.

Calico, pretty cool story man, nice angel. Some drowning, gun shots. Dope. The one this i was looking for more that never came where multies. You had some that you punctuated around, but this isnt really a text battle, so that also took from them in my eye balls. You had a good story, survival, maybe just spice up the rhymes some and paint some better pictures with metas and similes.


All in all, everyone did pretty well. MVGT 3rd string QB.
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Re: Topical Battle Royale Preliminary

Post by Deception » Mon Jul 25, 2011 12:25 am

ima give my vote to QB, i dont have time to explain realy but im sure the above have explained enough, i enjoyed his verse the best.

Potassium solutions as answers to my criminal selections in question
after a last meal and undressing im tied down as they reveal the final lesson
I found a form of protection, by eating iron chips off of the penitentiary bars
the consumption of metal shards manipulates my genetical code symmetry parts

this was hella tight from my point of veiw

anyway i better go back to work peace.
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Re: Topical Battle Royale Preliminary

Post by Tha Dark Prince » Mon Jul 25, 2011 9:01 am

3rd String QB:
This was a dope piece of work, good storytelling very vivid imagery and creativety. Flow was good

Baron Enders:
your flow was good here n some multies were decent, the rhyme scheme was pretty different to that of common ones, i enjoyed this piece, could have been better in certain ways I feel, but was an enjoyable read overall.

Shazo:
this was a good read, flow on point, creative, good use of meta's, good imagery

Deception:
this was ok, concepts were good though execution of them could be way better considering the level of your written drops I've read. Flow a bit off here n there but overall this is decent

Catastrophic:
you need to up your game a shitload dawg, put more effort into what you write, make it more complex and write with the intention of capturing the audience (readers in this case) and keeping us hooked. Keep writing & learning

Calico:
this was cool, simple and very enjoyable, flow good, decent multies, nice storytelling, good overall

Everybody came good here, enjoyed and liked nearly all the verses, imo the winner would be between 3rd string and Shazo, both were really impressive and wrote excellently. Calico and Baron had good stuff too.

Between the 2, Storytelling is a tie imo, flow, creativetyis shazo's, metas tie, consistency is 3rd's for sure, impact surely is shazo's

MVGT: Shazo ore complex and write with the intention of capturing the audience (readers in this case) and keeping us hooked. Keep writing & learning

Calico:
this was cool, simple and very enjoyable, flow good, decent multies, nice storytelling, good overall

Everybody came good here, enjoyed and liked nearly all the verses, imo the winner would be between 3rd string and Shazo, both were really impressive and wrote excellently. Calico and Baron had good stuff too.

Between the 2, Storytelling is a tie imo, flow, creativetyis shazo's, metas tie, consistency is 3rd's for sure, impact surely is shazo's

MVGT: Shazo

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Re: Topical Battle Royale Preliminary

Post by AntiMaTTer » Tue Jul 26, 2011 1:13 am

ewww

i thought i had until monday.. gross.

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Re: Topical Battle Royale Preliminary

Post by leeroi green » Tue Jul 26, 2011 4:15 am

Mvgt shazo props to all

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Re: Topical Battle Royale Preliminary

Post by ScottJames » Thu Aug 04, 2011 3:55 am

I GOTTA VOTE 3RD STRING
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WINS:
Ekmos - KO ... Duc3 - KO ... Jesodist - KO ... MagicMark - KO ... Animul_Instinkz - KO ... Old Rotten - KO ... Dr Kevorkian - KO ... Ambition - KO ... Eclipse - KO ... Domino - 5-3 ... Crimson - KO ... MC Scars - KO ... Modern Defiance - KO ... Tempest - KO ... QwarterZ - KO ... TreTru - KO ... Quix - KO ... Grim/Leeroi Green - KO ... Knowmad - KO ... Cre@tiv3 - KO ... MVario - TKO ... Hazard - KO ... ER - KO ... Colossus - KO ... FlipSide - KO ... JackDaRippa - KO ... JSteel - KO ... Kau The Lion - KO ... 32Neilz - KO ... Evolution - TKO ... Shazo - KO ... CBK - KO
LOSSES:
Cee4 - 5-3
OVERALL:
31-1

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