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he's in the minors chasin' dreams, but my game is major league
so even though he isn't in my class, i'll school H from A to Z

his work never gets a second glance, so he collabed with vets and champs
but if he played the sideline, his Team Haz a better chance

girls are never flirty with him cause he's nerdy and thin
so the only way H is gettin' banged is through a dirty syringe

people gotta face palm at the duds this cockless lame drops
so they don't need protective goggles to watch this H bomb

read my lyrical content label: "when dropped, it's fatal"
so i'll put H in a box like the periodic table

Nice battle guys....

lets start wtih 360... your opener and closer were pretty nice... i think you took some time on your opener cause it came out pretty strong honestly... and i did like the name play on it

he's in the minors chasin' dreams, but my game is major league
so even though he isn't in my class, i'll school H from A to Z

the rest of the verse was kind of moderate and weak... didn't really feel u kept a connection of strength as you did with your opener but i did like it

read my lyrical content label: "when dropped, it's fatal"
so i'll put H in a box like the periodic table

Haz

damn... u took his name and just ran with it honestly... ya whole verse was pretty sweet... i LOL'd at it haha

but lets get to the votes

Punchlines - Haz... 360 had some but just didn't connect like Haz's
Multies - tie but leaning more towards Haz
Flow - tied
Nameplay - again tied but Haz's were just stronger
Creativity - tied

360 you had some good shit... i see you're elevating and thats a good thing... just keep hittin up the Center Of Elevation and keep battling


MVGT: Haz

1-0 Haz Uppin!

360

he's in the minors chasin' dreams, but my game is major league
so even though he isn't in my class, i'll school H from A to Z
this was ok im not a big fan of this punch style but its somewhat creative soooo 3/5

his work never gets a second glance, so he collabed with vets and champs
but if he played the sideline, his Team Haz a better chance
setup was eh... and has on haz is hella simple imo 2/5

girls are never flirty with him cause he's nerdy and thin
so the only way H is gettin' banged is through a dirty syringe
wasnt feeling this much... i see were u was going but it could have been so much better worded 2/5

people gotta face palm at the duds this cockless lame drops
so they don't need protective goggles to watch this H bomb
eeewwwww honestly its the h punches... imo it makes for weak attempts at name play sometimes its ok but you seriously over used it... 1/5

read my lyrical content label: "when dropped, it's fatal"
so i'll put H in a box like the periodic table
same as above a pretty basic universal punch... a lil better then the last one but still more of the same 2/5

overall 10/25 kind of a blah verse you reached on the name play... and came pretty basic in the other cats


Vs

HAZ

You're Stuck In ya Shame..Far From a Movement.. Loving The chains
This Sucker's a Lame.. If Rank Was The Case, You'd Live Up Ta Ya Name (#360)
this was ok seen similar punches though so not super creative 2/5


Win? U Ain't Much Of a Boss,Misscarriage style you'll be In Touch with ya Loss
Loser Got So Much Anger In Him Built Cus Like a Painter In a Kilt..Scott's Been BRUSHING HIM OFF
this was decent the punch made me laugh but could have been worded better 3/5

The Prophey's Scripted, I Got a 360 Deal..To Rip ya On My own Time, Why Bother Me With It??
Thinking He's Nice Dude Gotta Be Twisted..People Agree Sarcastically Then Play 3..Like a Lottery Ticket'
i like the use of lines here... doubled up on the punch and shortened the setups... but the punches didn't hit very hard 2/5

I'd Bury you With a Session..Ur Missing Concepts, U Ain't a Lyricist Thats a Misconception
Fuck U N ya Opinion, I'll Enlist Ya Under..U Got a Critics Hunger..All U Do Is Feed,Afraid Of The Written Section
ok personal here... dropping something other then name play and pushing out facts... nice 3/5

I'm All Sort's Of Reckless, Throw a Punch Or 2, Sending 360 Down..Like I Wired Money From New York To Texas
I Bet U Thought U Had Ton's Of Luck...Haz Had To Put U Back In Line.. 360, Ya Number's Up...
best lines of the battle, another 2 punch bar... it was simple yet it hit hard 4/5

overall 14/25 a ok verse just a bit inconsistent some good hit but also some misses...

so Haz gets my vote a better overall score.. and just a better overall verse

he's in the minors chasin' dreams, but my game is major league
so even though he isn't in my class, i'll school H from A to Z
^^^
Decent bar and punch. Not that hard hitting but an ok opener.

his work never gets a second glance, so he collabed with vets and champs
but if he played the sideline, his Team Haz a better chance
^^^
Not really feeling this one. The haz/has wordplay is played although haz has one of the hardest names to go off.

girls are never flirty with him cause he's nerdy and thin
so the only way H is gettin' banged is through a dirty syringe
^^^
A decent punch here

people gotta face palm at the duds this cockless lame drops
so they don't need protective goggles to watch this H bomb
^^^
The idea itself is good but the whole “H” thing is getting a bit repetitive now. Ive never heard him being referred to as H so its reaching a bit

read my lyrical content label: "when dropped, it's fatal"
so i'll put H in a box like the periodic table
^^^
Again the punch is decent but just using the letter H is lazy imo.

Overall a decent verse. The flow was good, multis were decent. U have potential and some good ideas and concepts. Id like to see u put a bit more effort in and try and include some personals. The wordplay was a bit lazy and became repetitive, although like i said haz is a hard name to play around with and the amount of battles hes been in every possible nameplay has been done already.

You're Stuck In ya Shame..Far From a Movement.. Loving The chains
This Sucker's a Lame.. If Rank Was The Case, You'd Live Up Ta Ya Name (#360)
^^^
Nice flow and good punch. The better of the two opening bars

Win? U Ain't Much Of a Boss,Misscarriage style you'll be In Touch with ya Loss
Loser Got So Much Anger In Him Built Cus Like a Painter In a Kilt..Scott's Been BRUSHING HIM OFF
^^^
Good bar all round. A nice jab in the first line and a good punch/personal in the second

The Prophey's Scripted, I Got a 360 Deal..To Rip ya On My own Time, Why Bother Me With It??
Thinking He's Nice Dude Gotta Be Twisted..People Agree Sarcastically Then Play 3..Like a Lottery Ticket'
^^^
Spelling prophecy wrong fucked the flow up a little if im being super critical. This was ur worst bar imo. I had to google the lottery thing and just calling him 3 is a bit lazy.

I'd Bury you With a Session..Ur Missing Concepts, U Ain't a Lyricist Thats a Misconception
Fuck U N ya Opinion, I'll Enlist Ya Under..U Got a Critics Hunger..All U Do Is Feed,Afraid Of The Written Section
^^^
The build up was better than the end punch but still an ok bar

I'm All Sort's Of Reckless, Throw a Punch Or 2, Sending 360 Down..Like I Wired Money From New York To Texas
I Bet U Thought U Had Ton's Of Luck...Haz Had To Put U Back In Line.. 360, Ya Number's Up...
^^^
A good closer. The first punch was ok. The closer was my favourite of the battle. The 360/back in line was clever.


Overall a good verse. Flow and multis were spot on. A few really good punches and a couple of attempts at personals. Ur style seems a lot easier to follow now than it was back in the day.

Punches – haz
Personals –haz
Multis - tie
Flow - tie
Nameplay – haz

VOTE - HAZ

damnn good battle it was like simplicity verse comlexity here in almost every category....

360 came basic with a good flow funny punchline-personals an some dope lines.. the a to z opener was played but the set up was fresh an original and well worded.

haz came more detailed in almost every sense his wordplay name plays were harder hitting imo an his multies helped his longer lines to flow however i felt 360's verse flowed easier due to its shorter more direct context.

my fav line overall in the battle was 360's dirty syringe line .. dope line dude

but mvgt haz...
simply because he came with more.. seriously tho good battle an it could have went either tbh if 360 had have utilised his line length to better effect.

HAZ WINS BY KO

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