Felon Vs Comeback Kid

[Felon]

House rules.. 4-5 bars.. dont take tooo long to drop!!

-- Wed Sep 21, 2011 1:54 pm --

Check..

[CBK]

i'll outwit this felon like its some kind of rhyming game
he couldnt "play on words" if he was on a alphabetic climbing frame.
this bitch aint shit to me,witness this history,CBK's about to secure his first victory
felon couldnt write "wordplay" if he wrote a pantomime on the dictionary,
dont call me out fag,the chrome get thrown to your dome
kid beating down on felons like a scene from home alone.
So fuck this criminal who's knowledge is minimal and his abominable lyrics
i'll leave him fucked up behind my bars like prison conjugal visits.
im like pest control getting rid of this vermin visionary
coz you "rats" are under "rated" look that up in a dictionary

[Felon]

You need to fix up.. calling me wack when you hit with a limp punch
No wisdom.. i’ll put this cracker in a box!.. like packing my kids lunch
Sit up.. cus ya look like a broken tripod for a telescope.. yeh… you man!
Cus i really cant stand you.. and if I did!.. I’d still see right through ya..
Loser!!.. ya shits dry.. not dope!.. carry on and you’ll blind ya hopes
Votes!... he’ll be getting his no’s left to right.. like hes sniffing lines of coke!
Ya hypes exposed.. no need to strike a pose!!.. Ima finish this quickly
Ya cant diss me!!......... when ya come back lasts as long as britney’s
All ya punches miss me!.. ima breakdown ya lines cus they’re played out
Ya only got saink fresh in ya hands… when ya touching kids in the playground!

[jayzon_black]

My votes are simple and explained, so here you go:

Flow: CBK, the length, rhyme scheme and rhythm work well. I can feel this turning into an actual battle verse. Felon, I liked a couple of the punches, but lines weren't always rhyming, nor was the form helping with the flow.

CBK takes this one.

Punches: Bars 1, 3, and 4 go to CBK. Take that back, Felon you owned that 3rd bar. I loved the whole no's left to right like sniffin lines of coke, great wordplay. The Britney's comeback was solid because it was more of a personal punch. I'd say that this one was a tie because CBK was more consistent with his hits, but when felon hit it hit a little harder.

Tie

Personals: CBK used the felon play once for real and a slight subliminal another time when referencing jail. Felon used the comeback line once nicely with the Britney comment, and kinda played off of the whole kid's lunches...ultimately I would've liked to have seen more from both so...Tie.

Tie.

Enjoyment: CBK. I was digging the flow, the wordplay was nice and it just fit. Felon handled where it counted, but I just feel like the flow did him in, I wasn't catching the vibe and it didn't work as well for me.

CBK

So...Overall MVGT: CBK

[Orfadox]

Ok Read Both Verses Twice Before Voting So Here Goes



Flow - CBK, Felon Your Flow Werent To Bad But The Way You Formed Ya Lines Sort Of Through Me Off A Couple O Times Where As I Read CBK Smoothly



Punches - Tie, Both Of You Had Some Nice Punches In There CBK Had More But When Felons Did Hit They Hit Hard


Personals - Tie, I Only Noticed One From Each Of Ya


Enjoyment - CBK, Felon You Had Some Nice Lines But Your Flow Fell Off A Couple Of Times For Me Where As CBK Was More Constant





MVGT - CBK



Surprisingly Only Just Though...Nice Battle Fellas

[AntiMaTTer]

You need to fix up.. calling me wack when you hit with a limp punch
No wisdom.. i’ll put this cracker in a box!.. like packing my kids lunch
Sit up.. cus ya look like a broken tripod for a telescope.. yeh… you man!
Cus i really cant stand you.. and if I did!.. I’d still see right through ya..
lost me at the end of the last line here with the rhyme but the punch connected but was iffy. flow at first was str8

Loser!!.. ya shits dry.. not dope!.. carry on and you’ll blind ya hopes
Votes!... he’ll be getting his no’s left to right.. like hes sniffing lines of coke!
Ya hypes exposed.. no need to strike a pose!!.. Ima finish this quickly
Ya cant diss me!!......... when ya come back lasts as long as britney’s
lol last line here made me laugh

All ya punches miss me!.. ima breakdown ya lines cus they’re played out
Ya only got saink fresh in ya hands… when ya touching kids in the playground!
last lines were ok, coulda been tweaked or worded better but it was str8

was a pretty close match up honestly. CBK had decent flow with punch attempts
where as felon had some punchs that connected decent with a good flow and a few choppy parts

Punchs-felon
Flow-kid
Puns-felon
Multis-felon

vote-felon, kid can suggest this as a hate vote but my shit stands

[Lawgix]

Okay... so this was a decent battle... nothing too major... but i'm gonna break this down into the bars that i liked and disliked from each of you.. starting with!!!

ComeBack Kid (CBK)

ya verse was okay man... seemed to kinda lack in places... it hit but not very strong IMO... i think u need to go hit up Center Of Elevation and check out what it has to offer... you'll learn a lot more than somebody taking you under their wing and showing you the ropes... learn from some Vets that have been here longer than dirt... lmao

but back to ya verse

some of the cool lines...

"this bitch aint shit to me,witness this history,CBK's about to secure his first victory
felon couldnt write "wordplay" if he wrote a pantomime on the dictionary"


that was a pretty cool line actually

"dont call me out fag,the chrome get thrown to your dome
kid beating down on felons like a scene from home alone."

even tho i didn't hit too hard... i thought it was kind of effective in a way and the gun talk is kinda lame to be honest....

now to move on to some of the weaker lines and the rest of your lines really didn't add up to much...

"im like pest control getting rid of this vermin visionary
coz you "rats" are under "rated" look that up in a dictionary"

umm.... what?.... this is why you need Center Of Elevation... learn where to put ya punches in and how to word them better to make em stronger...

"i'll outwit this felon like its some kind of rhyming game
he couldnt "play on words" if he was on a alphabetic climbing frame."

yeah man Opener was kinda whack...

the rest of it just wasn't workin out in your favor...


Now We Move Onto Felon!!!

honestly man i think ya verse came the hardest... there were a couple of weak lines in it that really didn't pack the punch like it should have but still man they were "some what" effective... like these

"Ya hypes exposed.. no need to strike a pose!!.. Ima finish this quickly
Ya cant diss me!!......... when ya come back lasts as long as britney’s"

"Sit up.. cus ya look like a broken tripod for a telescope.. yeh… you man!
Cus i really cant stand you.. and if I did!.. I’d still see right through ya.."

i'll say it again dude... wasn't effective... really wasn't a personal more like a lame filler... keep hittin your opponent with NON STOP personals... study up the dude you're facin before a battle...

AND NOW THE FINAL VOTE!!!!


Punches: Felon

Flow: Tied

Multies: Felon

Personals: CBK

Enjoyment: Felon

I'm gonna give this one to Felon.... even tho you both had some lines that didn't really hit... Felon just kept coming harder... CBK word of advice... the Felon lines are almost pretty much played out now... so move onto bigger and better things... AND TO BOTH OF YOU!!!! STUDY YA OPPONENTS NEXT TIME!!!! i wanna see personals... i really had no thrill to read this battle but i did... cuz i was asked too... so

MVGT - Felon

2-2 tied...

Uppin....

[Alvin]

I revised my vote since CBK's verse is fully complete.

Punches: CBK, the new bars made your verse better in this catagory.

Flow: Felon

Multies: CBK

Personals: Tie, neither used much

Enjoyment: Tie, CBK had a better execution while Felon had slightly better content.

Vote: CBK



Felon wrote:
Do you think you could explain ya vote plz...saying he took this and i took that really doesnt seem fair...need to know how....


Your verse could have won if you would have had better execution. You had good content but it wasn't all laid out the way it should be done in a battle. The way you laid out the coke line was the way your whole verse should have been.

The above is 3rd String QBs vote, which has been removed due to an unhappy party member challenge. Do not make this request a habbit.

2-2.

[TreTru]

this'll be felons..imo

Punchs-felon his concepts seemed to end better CBK's Conjugal visits was prob his best line imo..
Flow-CBK..kids flo is easier to grasp..more consistent and steady wich werks better in text than audio imo..
personals-felon i felt felon had more here in fact i couldnt make out a personal on CB's verse
Nameplay-CBK i didnt see any real attempts at this by felon
Multis-Tie...they both missed a multi on one line...2 bars

Overall..Felon..i found his verse a lil more personal and his punches struck a tad bit harder in certain areas..

CBK ..i didnt like how u used Dictionary twice both as line enders...wich made it stand out..just try to use more Menacing concepts...like i said i liked the conjugal Visits line..just keep it agressive and fresh as possible...

MVGT...Felon

[Defiance]

my vote goes to felon

wordplay- tie (but leaning towards felon0
flow-felon
punches- felon
enjoyment felon
multis-tie
name play-tie

the way i see it this wasnt the greatest battle.. it was allright

a lot of swings and misses from both parties

but felon seemed to land more hits to me at least

vote- felon

[Lawgix]

4-2 Felon I'll Leave It Open For One More Vote For Felon Or Three More For CBK...

Uppin...

[Blake Downs]

i'll outwit this felon like its some kind of rhyming game
he couldnt "play on words" if he was on a alphabetic climbing frame.
(multies were there,the punch wasnt too strong it was ightt )

this bitch aint shit to me,witness this history,CBK's about to secure his first victory
felon couldnt write "wordplay" if he wrote a pantomime on the dictionary,
(the flow wasnt all the way there for me,and the punch didnt seem good to me)

dont call me out fag,the chrome get thrown to your dome
kid beating down on felons like a scene from home alone.
(this was decent,good nameplay,ok personal,ok-flow,ok punch)

So fuck this criminal who's knowledge is minimal and his abominable lyrics
i'll leave him fucked up behind my bars like prison conjugal visits.
(the flow was ightt,the punch was ightt,i like the felon/prison concepts a bit personal)

im like pest control getting rid of this vermin visionary
coz you "rats" are under "rated" look that up in a dictionary
(the flow was ight,the ender could have been better but it was ight,)

vs

You need to fix up.. calling me wack when you hit with a limp punch
No wisdom.. i’ll put this cracker in a box!.. like packing my kids lunch
(nice start! decen multies,decent punch)

Sit up.. cus ya look like a broken tripod for a telescope.. yeh… you man!
Cus i really cant stand you.. and if I did!.. I’d still see right through ya..
(not bad,decent flow hard to find but its there and and ight punch)

Loser!!.. ya shits dry.. not dope!.. carry on and you’ll blind ya hopes
Votes!... he’ll be getting his no’s left to right.. like hes sniffing lines of coke!
(the multies were on point,a bit personal and the punch was cool)

Ya hypes exposed.. no need to strike a pose!!.. Ima finish this quickly
Ya cant diss me!!......... when ya come back lasts as long as britney’s
(the multies still on point,the punch wasnt too strong on this one)

All ya punches miss me!.. ima breakdown ya lines cus they’re played out
Ya only got saink fresh in ya hands… when ya touching kids in the playground!
(a funny ender you both tied with the enders probably)
MVGT FELON