mOsArt -vS- Proverb (Proverb Wins 4-1 TKO)

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mOsArt -vS- Proverb (Proverb Wins 4-1 TKO)

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Re: mOsArt -vS- Proverb

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they say one man's sunset is another man's dawn/
while I rise, you drop like dog shit on another man's lawn/
this is Child's Play with no chucky involved/
just a man puppet, like dogs he follows the balls/
mOsArt's a homo, looking for grown folks/
making assholes deteriorate faster than ozones/
time is so old, but crime is so new/
ya name makes me feel like I'm rapping wit old dudes/
i come from the eternal nocturnal form of the abyss/
just like lips pussy you were born to get kissed/
cause like ya mom you get fucked by the form of a fist/
your the byproduct of your auqa ducts ya formin ta piss/
leave your hang ups in the shower/
this a blood bath nothing warmer than this/
cause cocky mother fuckers are born to get pissed/
i see you wearing that choker and i think saddam wore the same necklace/
Keep comments to yourself cause I heard enough chatter,
hang you by ya throat wit a rope soaked in venom of a Puff Adder
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Re: mOsArt -vS- Proverb

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Oooh...I'm sorry Yo...I posted up..Toked Up!! and Been Making Movies and Shit on my Side Hustle..lol..

Then I Been Getting At K. Panda With the Greets and all...Maaad Thanks Kid..

But Yo..Aight..

Absurd Words-Rehearsed Writtens..The Verbz he Prob-ly Spitten//
I'd Rather Listen, To Proverbs In Bliblical Scriptures then Read what this Cats-Shitten//
What's Missing? ya Punches-They Can't Land-My First Line Setup and Start Weaving//
Ya Gasping For Breathe my punchline's seeking...commence to CPR C'mon Dawg-Start Breathing//
Ya Crowds Leaving-I Had All 3 laughing when I said, not only is he Wet behind the ears-Ya Boys Teething//
Best BE-LEAVE-N, The Gods Speeches..Leave ya RIGHT Sleeveless//
Ya Like Beef Kid? Watch How I Dissect The Pro-Ya Herb..Now All is LEFT is This Novice...Verb//
Why Even Begin? My Kids are Hungry-no way they gonna be Thin//
My Odds were great we both Are Rookies...ya Lyrics are Wack-Yep-Its a Win-Win//
Watch How I cash In- After the John and Mac En-ROLL Ya Face Across The Clay//
What ya say? It Hurts-ya Bleeding? Oh that's right in the 5th line I said ya teething so Ya Gumming the Court-OUCH//
Now Go Ahead-Kick Rocks-1 by 1 As They Fall with Ya Teeth Outta-Ya-Mouth//
Instead of "Who Wanna Lose Quick" Just Ask WHO WANNA BATTLE//
I Thought You Were a Man..With a Pen In his Hand..Yet I Got a Boy Who Won't Stop Shaking My Rattle//
Go Tattle, ya Bereavement will say Proverb Committed suicide Flipped Over..Died from Sids//
But I'd like To Thank you Honestly for the Win as I Extend Ya Boy Is Blessed My 1st Victory Didn't Have To Go THU-HEM....

Blah...Couldn't close it properly...But Eh...Let the Voting Start..

Nice Battle Proverb..

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/xplis ... 73-15.html

I'll Be Back with another Vote...thought I voted on the other battle?!..lol
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Re: mOsArt -vS- Proverb

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they say one man's sunset is another man's dawn/
while I rise, you drop like dog shit on another man's lawn/
(good flips,decent flow,the multi syllables werent too great,decent punch)

this is Child's Play with no chucky involved/
just a man puppet, like dogs he follows the balls/
(this was funny,a decent personal,the flow was ok,good punch)

mOsArt's a homo, looking for grown folks/
making assholes deteriorate faster than ozones/
(this wasnt the strongest bar,decent multies,okish punch)

time is so old, but crime is so new/
ya name makes me feel like I'm rapping wit old dudes/
(lol,decent personal,ok multies,decent punch)

i come from the eternal nocturnal form of the abyss/
just like lips pussy you were born to get kissed/
(ok flow,kind of a weird bar ,this wasnt too strong of a punch)

cause like ya mom you get fucked by the form of a fist/
your the byproduct of your auqa ducts ya formin ta piss/
(this was silly,not the strongest punch,but a little personal)

leave your hang ups in the shower/
this a blood bath nothing warmer than this/
(this was ok,you did rhyme this with this,but i see what your gettin at)

cause cocky mother fuckers are born to get pissed/
i see you wearing that choker and i think saddam wore the same necklace/
(the flow was a bit off,but the punch was ight)

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Absurd Words-Rehearsed Writtens..The Verbz he Prob-ly Spitten//
I'd Rather Listen, To Proverbs In Bliblical Scriptures then Read what this Cats-Shitten//
(decent flow,decent multies,punch didnt connnect,ok attempt at nameplay)

What's Missing? ya Punches-They Can't Land-My First Line Setup and Start Weaving//
Ya Gasping For Breathe my punchline's seeking...commence to CPR C'mon Dawg-Start Breathing//
(the flow was there but the punch still wasnt strong on this one)

Ya Crowds Leaving-I Had All 3 laughing when I said, not only is he Wet behind the ears-Ya Boys Teething//
Best BE-LEAVE-N, The Gods Speeches..Leave ya RIGHT Sleeveless//
(decent flow,the punch wasnt strong,)

Ya Like Beef Kid? Watch How I Dissect The Pro-Ya Herb..Now All is LEFT is This Novice...Verb//
Why Even Begin? My Kids are Hungry-no way they gonna be Thin//
(ok flow,weak punch)

My Odds were great we both Are Rookies...ya Lyrics are Wack-Yep-Its a Win-Win//
Watch How I cash In- After the John and Mac En-ROLL Ya Face Across The Clay//
(flow was ight,weak punch though)

What ya say? It Hurts-ya Bleeding? Oh that's right in the 5th line I said ya teething so Ya Gumming the Court-OUCH//
Now Go Ahead-Kick Rocks-1 by 1 As They Fall with Ya Teeth Outta-Ya-Mouth//
(this was better,flow was ight,the punch was ight)

Instead of "Who Wanna Lose Quick" Just Ask WHO WANNA BATTLE//
I Thought You Were a Man..With a Pen In his Hand..Yet I Got a Boy Who Won't Stop Shaking My Rattle//
(this was better as well,decent personal,ok punch)

Go Tattle, ya Bereavement will say Proverb Committed suicide Flipped Over..Died from Sids//
But I'd like To Thank you Honestly for the Win as I Extend Ya Boy Is Blessed My 1st Victory Didn't Have To Go THU-HEM....
(the flow was ok,the punch was ight,)

i think proverb started off strong ended a little weaker,but seemed more consistent his bars werent as stretched,easier to read,both had some ok personals,but i think verb had more punches connecting.
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Re: mOsArt -vS- Proverb

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Proverb wrote: they say one man's sunset is another man's dawn/
while I rise, you drop like dog shit on another man's lawn/
this is Child's Play with no chucky involved/
just a man puppet, like dogs he follows the balls/
like the flow of it, pretty short simple style. punchs were ok

mOsArt's a homo, looking for grown folks/
making assholes deteriorate faster than ozones/
time is so old, but crime is so new/
ya name makes me feel like I'm rapping wit old dudes/
liked the flow of the first two lines, the old dudes punch wasnt
really much to me


i come from the eternal nocturnal form of the abyss/
just like lips pussy you were born to get kissed/
cause like ya mom you get fucked by the form of a fist/
your the byproduct of your auqa ducts ya formin ta piss/
decent flow again but nothing really hard hitting wise i think
but rhythm and that is still good.


leave your hang ups in the shower/
this a blood bath nothing warmer than this/
cause cocky mother fuckers are born to get pissed/
i see you wearing that choker and i think saddam wore the same necklace/
some reason "get pissed/necklace" doesnt sound too smooth, kinda forced i guess. but the flow before was pretty straight
-- Thu Aug 18, 2011 10:27 am --

Absurd Words-Rehearsed Writtens..The Verbz he Prob-ly Spitten//
I'd Rather Listen, To Proverbs In Bliblical Scriptures then Read what this Cats-Shitten//
What's Missing? ya Punches-They Can't Land-My First Line Setup and Start Weaving//
Ya Gasping For Breathe my punchline's seeking...commence to CPR C'mon Dawg-Start Breathing//
honestly sounds like a rap song by someone like young buck or something lol

Ya Crowds Leaving-I Had All 3 laughing when I said, not only is he Wet behind the ears-Ya Boys Teething//
Best BE-LEAVE-N, The Gods Speeches..Leave ya RIGHT Sleeveless//
Ya Like Beef Kid? Watch How I Dissect The Pro-Ya Herb..Now All is LEFT is This Novice...Verb//
Why Even Begin? My Kids are Hungry-no way they gonna be Thin//
My Odds were great we both Are Rookies...ya Lyrics are Wack-Yep-Its a Win-Win//
idk this was cool but and seems more like a rap song then a battle diss...still, flows pretty good some of the lines are over streched though, by some i mean all.
Watch How I cash In- After the John and Mac En-ROLL Ya Face Across The Clay//
What ya say? It Hurts-ya Bleeding? Oh that's right in the 5th line I said ya teething so Ya Gumming the Court-OUCH//
...wtf was this what just happened?

Now Go Ahead-Kick Rocks-1 by 1 As They Fall with Ya Teeth Outta-Ya-Mouth//
Instead of "Who Wanna Lose Quick" Just Ask WHO WANNA BATTLE//
I Thought You Were a Man..With a Pen In his Hand..Yet I Got a Boy Who Won't Stop Shaking My Rattle//
Go Tattle, ya Bereavement will say Proverb Committed suicide Flipped Over..Died from Sids//
But I'd like To Thank you Honestly for the Win as I Extend Ya Boy Is Blessed My 1st Victory Didn't Have To Go THU-HEM....
last line was best line in your verse, you should focus on punchs like that




FLOW- -Proverbs-
eh both were close to even but i liked

METAS/SIMS- -Proverbs-
Last line from mO was cool, but Verb had more

PUNCHS/NAMEFLIPS- -PROVERBS-
mO had lot more line wise, Verb kept it shorter but edged this out and kept his flow decent. mO had the "Verb" line but wasnt feelin it


Vote=proverbs, he had kept his structure clean and some-what more battle oriented, still not many nameflips. mOsarts seem more like Biggie track or something
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Post by plague_arsonist »

vote mosart to much wordplay and to many puches simple as that plus the flow went smoothly
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Re: mOsArt -vS- Proverb

Post by the-psychiatrist »

ok its mostly flossy talk here nthng much hitting, i liked yalls flow, it was different.. pro was following a scheme while blake seemed to be more off the dome.. this the kinda battle thats more fun to hear.. hard to vote but thats my breakdown

flow- blake got the edge
multies- pro had more
plays- nuthn really, they both had 1 bar each, ima gve that to mosart but nthn fancy
consistency- ? dunno it was mostly flossy talk
punches- again it was mostly jabs but ill gve that to pro for the balls and the fist line,

best line of the battle was:

just like lips pussy
you were born to
get kissed/
cause like ya mom
you get fucked by
the form of a fist/

set-up was bad though

i felt like u both ddnt care much u just spat it off the dome, i like proverbs rhyming, its consistant and got a scheme.. mosart u confused me at parts, was kinda all over the place, still respect to your flow tho ..

My vote goes to proverb

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-- Sat Aug 20, 2011 4:52 pm --

flow- i meant mosart not blake
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Re: mOsArt -vS- Proverb

Post by jayzon_black »

I don't know how blake managed to get a category vote when he wasn't one of the combatants...either a slip up or a subliminal shot at how the battle went...either way. Proverb i like your formatting easier to read, concise and legit. Couple rhyming issues like anti said, get pissed and necklace are slants which aren't bad, but they are kinda wide slants...folks and ozones are on the same level. Then you came in the last verse with shower and than this. Pretty much gave up a bar. With the slants they are easier to use in audio battles because you can play with how the words sound and how they land, but with writtens alot of the judging comes down to how it is received. You kinda want to write it so that the point comes across clearly and the flow is on hit. With that said...

mOsArt: I liked the content here, more than what you dropped in your other battle. What I wasn't feeling was the overstretched bars. Not only does it feel like a run-on sentence, the layout and format suffers and makes it difficult to follow. You still came with more hits, and connected more IMO which means...

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Flow- pro
punch- pro
Meta-pro
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