3rd String QB vs JSteel *CREW BATTLE*
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3rd String QB vs JSteel *CREW BATTLE*
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THE BROKEN GRANDFATHER CLOCK
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THE BROKEN GRANDFATHER CLOCK
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Re: 3rd String QB vs JSteel *CREW BATTLE*
Verse is done, but no icing will happen. I will drop it later.
-- Thu Jul 14, 2011 10:56 am --
the mighty pendulum, no longer swaying by the power of gears
A decaying longcase structure providing time of hours for years
an unmistakable tick tock, almost like a living creatures heart
yet blood vessels and mechanisms of metals seperate us apart
nothing man made can last forever, an uncontrollable circumstance
hypnotically the sound of that thumping heart beat used to dance
hammers, nails and wood blended together like the DNA of the builder
adorned in a three piece of machine, grain and an outline of silver
handlers carry the clock like pallbearers at a service of remembrance
similar endings, our clocks stop too so whats the difference?
one of them supporting the front began to first whistle then sing
softly humming sad natured orchestra arrangements made for strings
the base is slightly dinged and discolored from a lack of care
when it's tick tock faded appreciation was no longer there
the parts were investigated from the framework's foundation
like an autopsy that takes place before the ground waiting
methodically dissecting how the fractured time features vary
writing down it's origin and value like writing an obituary
-- Thu Jul 14, 2011 10:56 am --
the mighty pendulum, no longer swaying by the power of gears
A decaying longcase structure providing time of hours for years
an unmistakable tick tock, almost like a living creatures heart
yet blood vessels and mechanisms of metals seperate us apart
nothing man made can last forever, an uncontrollable circumstance
hypnotically the sound of that thumping heart beat used to dance
hammers, nails and wood blended together like the DNA of the builder
adorned in a three piece of machine, grain and an outline of silver
handlers carry the clock like pallbearers at a service of remembrance
similar endings, our clocks stop too so whats the difference?
one of them supporting the front began to first whistle then sing
softly humming sad natured orchestra arrangements made for strings
the base is slightly dinged and discolored from a lack of care
when it's tick tock faded appreciation was no longer there
the parts were investigated from the framework's foundation
like an autopsy that takes place before the ground waiting
methodically dissecting how the fractured time features vary
writing down it's origin and value like writing an obituary
Last edited by Sir Kevin O Shea on Fri Jul 15, 2011 2:00 am, edited 2 times in total.
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The Elitists:
"We don't diss anymore, we only write songs for charities and Christmas carrols" - Sir 3rd String QB
3rd String QB
Calico
Enlightend
Shazo
The Elitists:
"We don't diss anymore, we only write songs for charities and Christmas carrols" - Sir 3rd String QB
3rd String QB
Calico
Enlightend
Shazo
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Re: 3rd String QB vs JSteel *CREW BATTLE*
welcome to the inside of my head/
i felt the sun leave ,then revived from death./
(the grand father clock) it was so bland-after-shots from the new king whipped-its bliss./
its a grand-father-clock with beauty,it slit-its-wrists./
cuz a hand-harder-knocked its loosely fit-in-shit./
this new brand- armour- stopped it from fuming and rippin -shit./
its wisdom was impecable ,but the system had a better watch./
its livin was in-death,-a-spill of grippin memories of love./
the old clocks time was up,defeated,death hurts much./
it folds,dropped as the new watch releases and a new life has begun./
'the car accident gave him amnesia',the doctor said./
a scar massive,-this had me up,no sleeping in bed/my heart felt it in but i forgot what i loved then/
the past washed away, my
old minds left/
sitting,looking at the maze,boutta step/
making a move into a new time,the new clock ticking my life away over my head/
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-- Fri Jul 15, 2011 4:57 am --
gonna post my links just now
i felt the sun leave ,then revived from death./
(the grand father clock) it was so bland-after-shots from the new king whipped-its bliss./
its a grand-father-clock with beauty,it slit-its-wrists./
cuz a hand-harder-knocked its loosely fit-in-shit./
this new brand- armour- stopped it from fuming and rippin -shit./
its wisdom was impecable ,but the system had a better watch./
its livin was in-death,-a-spill of grippin memories of love./
the old clocks time was up,defeated,death hurts much./
it folds,dropped as the new watch releases and a new life has begun./
'the car accident gave him amnesia',the doctor said./
a scar massive,-this had me up,no sleeping in bed/my heart felt it in but i forgot what i loved then/
the past washed away, my
old minds left/
sitting,looking at the maze,boutta step/
making a move into a new time,the new clock ticking my life away over my head/
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-- Fri Jul 15, 2011 4:57 am --
gonna post my links just now
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Re: 3rd String QB vs JSteel *CREW BATTLE*
http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/i-nee ... 23216.html
http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/the-l ... 23094.html
My links, lets get the votes ladies and gentlemen.
http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/the-l ... 23094.html
My links, lets get the votes ladies and gentlemen.
Last edited by Sir Kevin O Shea on Fri Jul 15, 2011 5:17 am, edited 1 time in total.
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The Elitists:
"We don't diss anymore, we only write songs for charities and Christmas carrols" - Sir 3rd String QB
3rd String QB
Calico
Enlightend
Shazo
The Elitists:
"We don't diss anymore, we only write songs for charities and Christmas carrols" - Sir 3rd String QB
3rd String QB
Calico
Enlightend
Shazo
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Re: 3rd String QB vs JSteel *CREW BATTLE*
J Sttel, you never posted links you little girl... Shame on you
-Storytelling- QB, I did enjoy the concept J brought to the table, but i felt he fell short on his storytelling execution.
-Flow- QB
-Creativity- QB, his descriptions and Imagery really sealed the deal.
-Multies- QB. J's read rather simple, rhyming shit with shit? lol
-Wordplay- TIE
Hands down MVGT 3rd String. He just came better on almost every level. The end.
-Storytelling- QB, I did enjoy the concept J brought to the table, but i felt he fell short on his storytelling execution.
-Flow- QB
-Creativity- QB, his descriptions and Imagery really sealed the deal.
-Multies- QB. J's read rather simple, rhyming shit with shit? lol
-Wordplay- TIE
Hands down MVGT 3rd String. He just came better on almost every level. The end.
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Re: 3rd String QB vs JSteel *CREW BATTLE*
i hadnt had the time to vote these few days,but wil drop links before this closes...
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-- Sat Jul 16, 2011 9:31 am --
i hadnt had the time to vote these few days,but wil drop links before this closes...
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-- Sat Jul 16, 2011 9:31 am --
i hadnt had the time to vote these few days,but wil drop links before this closes...
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Re: 3rd String QB vs JSteel *CREW BATTLE*
Flow-QB
Creativity-QB
Storytelling-QB
Topic execution-QB
Wordplay-QB
Multies-eh...
QB's different take on the topic was really nice, he put alot of detail into that clock too.
Creativity-QB
Storytelling-QB
Topic execution-QB
Wordplay-QB
Multies-eh...
QB's different take on the topic was really nice, he put alot of detail into that clock too.
The Meek Shall Prosper... So they say :P
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Re: 3rd String QB vs JSteel *CREW BATTLE*
It felt like J had to rush to get his in before he was called a no-show. I would've enjoyed it more if he took the time to make something out of it. QB came with a nice story, flowed throughout, and stayed on the gas. MVGT: QB
Ride out, Glide out.
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Re: 3rd String QB vs JSteel *CREW BATTLE*
This looks like a 3-0 K.O. Thank you for the votes. Jsteel, we should have a rematch in the future.
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The Elitists:
"We don't diss anymore, we only write songs for charities and Christmas carrols" - Sir 3rd String QB
3rd String QB
Calico
Enlightend
Shazo
The Elitists:
"We don't diss anymore, we only write songs for charities and Christmas carrols" - Sir 3rd String QB
3rd String QB
Calico
Enlightend
Shazo
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Re: 3rd String QB vs JSteel *CREW BATTLE*
3-0 k.o. i also think qb won this one overall
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