(Test Battle) Kause MC -vs- Little Jay (Kause MC wins TKO)

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(Test Battle) Kause MC -vs- Little Jay (Kause MC wins TKO)

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House rules.

4 bars / 8 lines

due 24 hours after both check..

good luck jay count this as my check..
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Re: Kause MC -vs- Little Jay

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Re: Kause MC -vs- Little Jay

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I guess ill drop first..

Im used to rollin them fat blunts, only the finest to get blazed/
But i guess i can make an exception and smoke a little jay for a change/
Fuck begginers luck, ill delete your hopes and dreams quick/
Jays so small he cant grip his little dick so he sits to take a piss/
I was an amatuer at one stage aswel i barely knew what rhymin was/
But this jays best to stay at the corner shop chillin with silent bob/
Take this battle as a lesson regardless of what you may say/
You gotta remember In the alphabet "I" and "k" soround the "j"/

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I guess ill drop first..

Im used to rollin them fat blunts, only the finest to get blazed/
But i guess i can make an exception and smoke a little jay for a change/
Fuck begginers luck, ill delete your hopes and dreams quick/
Jays so small he cant grip his little dick so he sits to take a piss/
I was an amatuer at one stage aswel i barely knew what rhymin was/
But this jays best to stay at the corner shop chillin with silent bob/
Take this battle as a lesson regardless of what you may say/
You gotta remember In the alphabet "I" and "k" soround the "j"/
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Re: Kause MC -vs- Little Jay

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YOU "CHOSE ME TO BATTLE" so you're "taken an L"..KAUSE and EFFECT.
I'll drop your jaw to your chest and put permanent pause in your breathe,

Just "beKAUSE" I'm better I'll walk all over him like a flight of stairs,
Until the mere sight of his face gives Freddy Kruger "nightmares"

Play "Kuase" like poker, in this battle hes a "joker" ..... so delirious,
i stabbed a knife through his lips and said why so serious?

You've got no "Kause" to stand just sit down, you sound like bitches sound,
Don't make me "RHIANNA" your face like I was chris brown,
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Re: Kause MC -vs- Little Jay

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Alright both were nice

Flow-JAY
Punches-MC
Personal-MC,jay you didnt have anything big personal wise you mentioned his name a couple times but thats it
Enjoyment-JAY
Ryhmes-Jay, his were a little bit different compared to MCs

MVGT-JAY

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multis - jay
flow - mc
punches - jay
inner rhymes - neither
personal - neither

jay gets my vote
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Re: Kause MC -vs- Little Jay

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ok...alot of kauses lines seemed played although he did use a fair amount of flips..he had no real multis either and not very hard of his punches because of the simplicity...JAY came with a few more clever lines although a couple came off soft...Jay deffinitely used more multis and had effective name flips..overall this battle was ok but overall but...
MVGT: JAY...he just came with a better verse imo
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Re: Kause MC -vs- Little Jay

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ok ok im a vote on this now....

kause you didnt come very hard at all some off your punches hit some just flopped..... and your flow was all over the place, but i was feelin the first and bar and altho the silent bob and ijk bar didnt hit hard they were ok........


now lil jay after the first bar... you also had a sloppy flow and all your lines felt like fillers to me not hard hitting at all... on the edge/over the line of lame to be honest....

i vote kause.... i think you won but you didnt kill um or anything
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Re: Kause MC -vs- Little Jay

Post by Alvin »

1-1


Grims vote doesn't count due to prior crew affiliation.
Nell is also from their same home site with insufficient posts to be taken serious.


As it stands:

1 - 1

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Re: Kause MC -vs- Little Jay

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Im used to rollin them fat blunts, only the finest to get blazed/
But i guess i can make an exception and smoke a little jay for a change/

PLAYED. BUT DECENT

Fuck begginers luck, ill delete your hopes and dreams quick/
Jays so small he cant grip his little dick so he sits to take a piss/

NO.

I was an amatuer at one stage aswel i barely knew what rhymin was/
But this jays best to stay at the corner shop chillin with silent bob/

NO.

Take this battle as a lesson regardless of what you may say/
You gotta remember In the alphabet "I" and "k" soround the "j"/

EH, DECENT.





YOU "CHOSE ME TO BATTLE" so you're "taken an L"..KAUSE and EFFECT.
I'll drop your jaw to your chest and put permanent pause in your breathe,

TOO SIMPLE.

Just "beKAUSE" I'm better I'll walk all over him like a flight of stairs,
Until the mere sight of his face gives Freddy Kruger "nightmares"

NO.

Play "Kuase" like poker, in this battle hes a "joker" ..... so delirious,
i stabbed a knife through his lips and said why so serious?

NO.

You've got no "Kause" to stand just sit down, you sound like bitches sound,
Don't make me "RHIANNA" your face like I was chris brown,

NO.



WEAK BATTLE
VOTE: KAUSE MC
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Re: Kause MC -vs- Little Jay

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The mutha fucking breakdown


Kause

Im used to rollin them fat blunts, only the finest to get blazed/
But i guess i can make an exception and smoke a little jay for a change/

This is a cool nameplay. Very simple, yet the wording was done well, so nothing feels forced at all. Nice bar.

Fuck begginers luck, ill delete your hopes and dreams quick/
Jays so small he cant grip his little dick so he sits to take a piss/

This is way too simple. You could come with a much more solid punchline and you have basically no wordplay.

I was an amatuer at one stage aswel i barely knew what rhymin was/
But this jays best to stay at the corner shop chillin with silent bob/

Depending on accent, I could see how this would flow, but it's almost too close for comfort. I see where you were going with the wordplay, but you might have been able to incorporate with more or incorporate some with the opening line to have it hit harder.

Take this battle as a lesson regardless of what you may say/
You gotta remember In the alphabet "I" and "k" soround the "j"/

I see the wordplay there, though I feel this punchline could have been more direct.



Little Jay

YOU "CHOSE ME TO BATTLE" so you're "taken an L"..KAUSE and EFFECT.
I'll drop your jaw to your chest and put permanent pause in your breathe,

This is a cool line. The first bar didnt really connect with the wordplay like I think you meant for it to... Punchline is aight though.

Just "beKAUSE" I'm better I'll walk all over him like a flight of stairs,
Until the mere sight of his face gives Freddy Kruger "nightmares"

Nah man, this is more like you are saying something than really cracking down and making it a point to laugh at him. Nothing really jaw dropping here. The beKAUSE wordplay could be used by anyone in that manner. Gotta be more creative with it.

Play "Kuase" like poker, in this battle hes a "joker" ..... so delirious,
i stabbed a knife through his lips and said why so serious?

Nah man, if you are going to use a poker line, you have to be more creative. This stuff is played like crazy. I see where you were going with the Joker reference, but here you are going with more of a horrorcore type verse instead of an actual battle.

You've got no "Kause" to stand just sit down, you sound like bitches sound,
Don't make me "RHIANNA" your face like I was chris brown,

Sound like bitches sound? That's worded a little weird. What does Rhianna your face mean?



Over-all, I think both of you guys have alot to work on to develop your craft. I think you both have good ideas for wordplay and punchlines, but you just dont deliver that hard. I think Kause had better wordplay, with slightly harder punches overall. Both flowed pretty easily to me.

My vote goes to Kause.
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Re: Kause MC -vs- Little Jay

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Kause - basic but to the point. Nothing amazing here really but a solid verse for what it was. Opening line was probably your best line imo but simple as its best. Flow good. No real wordplay or multis.

Little Jay - Dragged the name play to the dirt.... that is what hurt you imo... try flipping it I'm a different direction sometimes.. it was way to simple.. you could actually predict the next line at time bcuz of the setup..

I agree that both should work on the craft. Text battles are a whole different realm believe me I know. It's very delicate to the readers bcuz we will take it how we want to bcuz its not audio.

MVGT: Kause

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Re: Kause MC -vs- Little Jay

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Kause MC wins TKO
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