DemonEyes -vs- f**k u up! (FU Wins K.O. 4-0)

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DemonEyes -vs- f**k u up! (FU Wins K.O. 4-0)

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4 bars, house rules, due 24hour after check-in

-- Thu Nov 11, 2010 5:04 pm --

this lilfuck say he cool blood,his name say hes gay,he wet like da pool bruh
he pulled up,abercrombie and a crew cut,he puts poop-Duds on his tooth brush

fuck u up?what the fuck,only thing you 'fucking up' is a dude's butt
and as far as your rap career goes.... 2 bucks

your mixtape wit milli vanilli costs a few cents...
but mane im in the game while you on that new bench

steady watchin,me im ballin,you eat hella niggas at once..... MAJIN!!
you even rock all pink just like MAJIN!couldnt be high if you was a martian!
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I need to take a shower, but uhm.. Lets go.

Touch this? Fak aff!! I'm holy water burning Demons to Ashes
South paw left right n' Black Eyes the Fak out like Sun Glasses
The names for a reason, my L's are bullshyt caught u teething
U on top? NO! I'll Stomp ya head thro apt' floor Ok now ur Top! Ceiling.
This is nothing to discuss I just key n Buss! w/e he's useless
But I aint no JOKE as i STAB EYES Like THREE STOOGES
I do as I feel my minds to strong, abstract echelon.. Demon Eyes?
I can Knock you out the pic hitting back space on this emoticon :evil: :twisted:

In and out! Only I does it like that...
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Post by Kuhlerblynd »

Aight, Ill break this down for you gentlemen...

Vote on my battle with Orfadox if you havent by the time you real this DemonEyes. Thanks.

Anyhow... Here we go...

Demon

this lilfuck say he cool blood,his name say hes gay,he wet like da pool bruh
he pulled up,abercrombie and a crew cut,he puts poop-Duds on his tooth brush

This just isnt hard hitting as far as punches go IMO. I like the imagery, and the flow.

fuck u up?what the fuck,only thing you 'fucking up' is a dude's butt
and as far as your rap career goes.... 2 bucks

I see where you were going with this, but once again, it just wasnt hard hitting IMO. And the first line isnt something I cared for at all.

your mixtape wit milli vanilli costs a few cents...
but mane im in the game while you on that new bench

Once again, I see where you are going with this, but its not hard hitting. With this concept you can be much more creative which would make your punch alot more effective.

steady watchin,me im ballin,you eat hella niggas at once..... MAJIN!!
you even rock all pink just like MAJIN!couldnt be high if you was a martian!

The high as a martian concept is tight, but the rest of this didnt really come together for me.

Fuck U Up

Touch this? Fak aff!! I'm holy water burning Demons to Ashes
South paw left right n' Black Eyes the Fak out like Sun Glasses

The concepts here are good, but not really hard hitting with the punch IMO. Just seems to fall short man.

The names for a reason, my L's are bullshyt caught u teething
U on top? NO! I'll Stomp ya head thro apt' floor Ok now ur Top! Ceiling.

This one is better. The wording at the end was weird kind of, but this was much more effective.

This is nothing to discuss I just key n Buss! w/e he's useless
But I aint no JOKE as i STAB EYES Like THREE STOOGES

This cracked me up. I like how this was laid out. Nice punch.

I do as I feel my minds to strong, abstract echelon.. Demon Eyes?
I can Knock you out the pic hitting back space on this emoticon

This is a good concept, and delivered okay, but couldve been worded different to hit harder IMO.



Guys you both have some to work on, but you have good concepts and thats half the battle, so to speak haha. You just have to get your punchlines down a little better and everything else will fall in place.

Vote- Fuck U Up, just for having a better verse over-all
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Post by Orfadox »

Ok Haven't Rally Got Time To Give This A Complete Breakdown Right Now


DemonEyes I Thought Your Verse Was Aiight Nothing Speical Only Seen One Line That Stood Out To Me Which Was This

fuck u up?what the fuck,only thing you 'fucking up' is a dude's butt



Fuck U Up I Felt Your Verse Had More And Better Punches Loved This Bar


This is nothing to discuss I just key n Buss! w/e he's useless
But I aint no JOKE as i STAB EYES Like THREE STOOGES





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Post by Quix »

this wasn't really even close ... Fuck you up took this easy!

The three stooges line was prolly the best bar in the battle.

Demon's verse was quite simple, and didn't really have many punches.


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this lilfuck say he cool blood,his name say hes gay,he wet like da pool bruh
he pulled up,abercrombie and a crew cut,he puts poop-Duds on his tooth brush
(dont really know where you was going with this its a battle hommie attack him)

fuck u up?what the fuck,only thing you 'fucking up' is a dude's butt
and as far as your rap career goes.... 2 bucks
(this is played out like house party^)

your mixtape wit milli vanilli costs a few cents...
but mane im in the game while you on that new bench
(this is alright but nothing that caught my attention)

steady watchin,me im ballin,you eat hella niggas at once..... MAJIN!!
you even rock all pink just like MAJIN!couldnt be high if you was a martian!
(really played out)

-- Mon Nov 15, 2010 6:24 am --

Touch this? Fak aff!! I'm holy water burning Demons to Ashes
South paw left right n' Black Eyes the Fak out like Sun Glasses
(started off you coming right at him...better)

The names for a reason, my L's are bullshyt caught u teething
U on top? NO! I'll Stomp ya head thro apt' floor Ok now ur Top! Ceiling.
(this is alright 2)

This is nothing to discuss I just key n Buss! w/e he's useless
But I aint no JOKE as i STAB EYES Like THREE STOOGES
(this is the best in the whole battle nice punch)

I do as I feel my minds to strong, abstract echelon.. Demon Eyes?
I can Knock you out the pic hitting back space on this emoticon
(not the best punch to end with the ending should be the icing on the cake but its okay)

vote=fuck you up

voting reasons- demon nothing stood out in your verse 2 me
fuck you up- you hard punches that dropped multis were better.flow was better overall jus out did demon
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Records updated and thread closed.
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