Rugged Vs. IntrinsicCadence (Topical) (Rugged Wins 3-0 K.O.)

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Re: Rugged Vs. IntrinsicCadence (Topical)

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Don't know if it's necessary, but consider this my check in...

-- Wed Sep 15, 2010 2:57 pm --

I climb into my- Delorian and settle in-, ready to ride,
when suddenly a butterfly flaps its wings in front of my eye.

The effect causes me to swipe- my hand to strike- it down from its flight,
but I- hit a button, then all of a sudden- I'm at a new place in time.

I look around, only to see towerin' over me- this big fucker lookin' down,
with a grimace like “yum--- there's my dinner, I'mma chow down now.”

“Umm... wow...” seeps out of my mouth in a whimpering sound,
but my reflexes see a way out, and my foot finds the pedal and pounds.

This T-Rex ain't make believe, he's chasing me ably, and I'm unable to be free,
so I table these thoughts about escaping to safety and changing the plot.

I stop... pop open the door, plop my feet on the forest floor, stompin' on beetles galore.
I got my sling-shot cocked and ready for war, I stand steady all the way to my core.

And then I see him, this damn dinosaur- steppin' up into my cypher, achin' to bite my bacon,
I bait him in close- with curses and quotes- thrown from my throat- to blanket the silence with hope.

I aim up his nose, hopin' my ammo can make his brain go blaammoo, then I'd sing him an ode,
but that butterfly musta channeled my plan, cuz there he goes- kamikaze up the nose- pokin' holes in the brain, causing bellows of pain 'till he finally falls flat-lyin' lame.

(Now that's a butterfly effect unlike any other you've ever seen....)
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Yo Rugg, uppin this to remind ya of our battle here
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yo im pretty sure tomorrow is your last day for this before time's up
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i think both of yall could have came much better with this topic. it kind of sucks to have a bar limit of 16 lines when your trying to tell a story. i liked IC's story, it was more of what i expected to see. wasnt really believing ruggeds story because the whole golfer dude with a shotgun threw me off. his rhymes and everything else was set up way better though. id have to give the story to IC but he lacked in the rhyme area. its not that i didnt enjoy ruggeds story just the shotgun shit part.

so i give the edge to rugged, good battle guys.

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IntrinsicCadence wrote:Don't know if it's necessary, but consider this my check in...

-- Wed Sep 15, 2010 2:57 pm --

I climb into my- Delorian and settle in-, ready to ride,
when suddenly a butterfly flaps its wings in front of my eye.

The effect causes me to swipe- my hand to strike- it down from its flight,
but I- hit a button, then all of a sudden- I'm at a new place in time.

I look around, only to see towerin' over me- this big fucker lookin' down,
with a grimace like “yum--- there's my dinner, I'mma chow down now.”

“Umm... wow...” seeps out of my mouth in a whimpering sound,
but my reflexes see a way out, and my foot finds the pedal and pounds.

This T-Rex ain't make believe, he's chasing me ably, and I'm unable to be free,
so I table these thoughts about escaping to safety and changing the plot.

I stop... pop open the door, plop my feet on the forest floor, stompin' on beetles galore.
I got my sling-shot cocked and ready for war, I stand steady all the way to my core.

And then I see him, this damn dinosaur- steppin' up into my cypher, achin' to bite my bacon,
I bait him in close- with curses and quotes- thrown from my throat- to blanket the silence with hope.

I aim up his nose, hopin' my ammo can make his brain go blaammoo, then I'd sing him an ode,
but that butterfly musta channeled my plan, cuz there he goes- kamikaze up the nose- pokin' holes in the brain, causing bellows of pain 'till he finally falls flat-lyin' lame.

(Now that's a butterfly effect unlike any other you've ever seen....)

This was a pretty good, vivid display of topical shit. Rhymes were pretty good.
The story was pretty nice, the way you took out the dinosaur was pretty cool and descriptive. So good verse over all

-- Sun Oct 03, 2010 5:47 am --
Rugged wrote:Standing in a boring tour line..

At the Museum of Natural History -- when all a sudden//
Something from the back was sniffing me -- "bet ya'll it's nothing"//
I turned, "holy shit it's a Triceratops", he tossed me to the right//
Knocked a mama to the side, any closer I prob-ly would of died//
Clouds hovered once the wind was knocked out of me -- people screaming//
Look & see mayhem all the way up to the top balcony -- creature's feeding//
The Triceratops ran away, peeps began clearing to the furthest door//
I found a bathroom, closed it & hid, peared into fear when I heard a roar//
The door opened & closed, shit who is it? -- the feet keep on pressing//
Probably could rip through the thin screw hinges -- & eat me in seconds//
Oh shit it's at the stall door, it heard me, the stall slams open//
It was a tall man smoking, "name is Ruggz", his golf bag showing//
Drivers sticking out, with a shotgun mixed in -- "fucking aye...//
I'm hitting a couple holes when I saw some pigeons -- run away//
There's a T-rex eating people at the clubhouse, it was good shit//
Never seen something like that, then I followed his foot prints//
Look kid, you got less guts than these dinosaur fossils//
We're bout to fight, hit the wall & try to walk to the side, horizontal"//
Me and Ruggz hit the hallway, fucking blood all over the place//
The smell of death was so potent I could feel it begin to sober the taste//
No sign of life, so we headed to the parking lot, found a t-rex in the park//
We flee left into cars, ducked down n' see plex ripped apart//
To the right we spotted a stegosaurus, but there was a bigger problem//
T-rex's nostrils flaired, he smelt our boiling blood, dinner called him//
Ruggz jumped up w/ his shotgun n' began shooting, gives' em a blast//
Til T-rex swoops down and grabs a hold of him, rips him in half//
I paniced, grab Ruggz's shotgun n' ran back into the museum//
Stalked by shadows, moving faster than you can see them//
That was it, took a few steps back n' bumped into something mean//
My eyes stretched, I jump forward when I felt somthing touch my sleeve//
It's the guy behind in the tour line, holy shit it was just a dream//
Leaving me thinking it was probably just the dinosaur that' stuck in me//
The door opened & closed, shit who is it? -- the feet keep on pressing//
Probably could rip through the thin screw hinges -- & eat me in seconds//

that line, and the closer lines were the best in the battle to me. For the like, metaphoric parable type of shit. Pretty in depth, other parts could have been improved but this shit was pretty cool. Nice twist even the though dream shits played you did it nice.

Flow-Tie
Story-RE
Imagery-Tie

Vote- Rugged, good shit
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Re: Rugged Vs. IntrinsicCadence (Topical)

Post by Borat »

Flow- rugged, at some points in IC's drop I got lost.

Story- imma have to say rugged, I like that IC used time travel and went back into time. That's something I would have done but the ending was kinda rough. But still this was close.

Imagery- IC! Like I said I felt like I was in it. Seeing everything as I read it. Cool shit mate.

Well well well... I thought both of the drops were intertaining, rugged I like the twist I agree that the dream twist is played but it was done nice. IC I like the back to the future reference haha and I might add I felt like I was in the rap very very nice.

Vote - Rugged

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Alright, that's 3-0, mods can close this one up and give it to Rugg. Good battle Rugg, I'mma want a rematch topical someday in the future. I think if we both used the same amount of lines this woulda been closer (you had 32 lines, I had 16--- might I add you were supposed to write 16 lines). I think your story was better, but you also had double to amount of space to work with, so I'm definitely gonna want another shot at beating you at some point in the future...
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