Time Line VS Magic Mark(Magic Mark)

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Who will win?

Poll ended at Mon Jan 05, 2009 1:13 pm

Magic Mark
6
75%
Time Line
2
25%
 
Total votes: 8

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Time Line VS Magic Mark(Magic Mark)

Post by Time Line »

The race starts, Mark starts sprinting, and I start a
slow jog...
Magic puts 100% effort, I put 40%, and he still
gets the loss!!!

Well rip that patch, get trapped,locked, and
hatched you bring attacks, but collapsed because you simply cant rap...
Your paying for your votes because in reality, No ones
got this Dudes back!!!


Your Colder then cold, I'm experiencing your verse, but
remaining unfroze...
Im hotter then hot, and it shows, I got coals, that
glow from my clothes...

The epidemic is exposed, now widespread disease is
known,i got ur doors close, catch the 'G virus
like a cold,then i come bold, destroying this virus cuz im the
antidote...
Im a anti-joke, evaporating all fluids from the
line,Now your joke is gone and i can say your humors
dry...






bigyrain@yahoo.com
battling in this ocean paddling with devotion cant fuck my bitch better u start imagining lotion.

myspace.com/raincollection
youtube.com/brownsunday
name_89@hotmail.com
hours : 7pm - until...
PM if anything....

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Post by Omega Bill »

Keep that youtube page out of your sig. It slows down peoples computers who don't use DSL or High Speed.
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Post by MagicMark »

imma beast n' he a poodle, my worst would prolly rape his best
with those addresses..you the 'rain man'.. cause you retarded n' aint makin' sense

faggot, i'll end ya too... im bendin' dude.. like a sick appendix do..
Why so many contact details bro? people want you the ta FUCK OFF THE SITE, so who'd wanna be friends wit you???...

you came alright, like ya bent queer's erection, but my spears'll wreck ya
A poll in this battle?... Timeline aint gettin' votes... like George Bush in THIS years elections!..

why you wanna battle the best? you weak son, OF COURSE YOU'LL GET TORN
imma a cool dude.. but this cat look like an osama bin laden's kid, abortion gone wrong..

i'll cut ya words short like the style of your verse, imma wind up this beef
cause we all know "time's as fake as they come" like peeps sellin' rolex's on the side of the street....

easy..
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Post by Jesodist »

The race starts, Mark starts sprinting, and I start a
slow jog...
Magic puts 100% effort, I put 40%, and he still
gets the loss!!!

^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Time line's intro was way harder than Magic hands down best and adresses dont rhyme its forced if you say them out loud.

why you wanna battle the best? you weak son, OF COURSE YOU'LL GET TORN
imma a cool dude.. but this cat look like an osama bin laden's kid, abortion gone wrong..
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
not very strong bar but the osama line was funny

i'll cut ya words short like the style of your verse, imma wind up this beef
cause we all know "time's as fake as they come" like peeps sellin' rolex's on the side of the street....

^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
not a ver strong ending in my opinion wasnt enough like to use it for an ending.


The epidemic is exposed, now widespread disease is
known,i got ur doors close, catch the 'G virus
like a cold,then i come bold, destroying this virus cuz im the
antidote...

^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
now this was a fuckin dope and original line he came hard with it. It was his best line in the verse aside from the intro.


no cats on this battle so its about the better verse and i think time line did his thing just like Mark.

but i am giving it to Time Line
THIS SITE IS AN EMBARASSMENT
FULL OF SNITCHES AND BITCHES WHO DICK RIDE IN BUNCHES.

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Post by MagicMark »

wtf?...

uppin'..
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Post by ÐÛÇ£» »

Lmao @ jesodist break down

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Post by Omega Bill »

Jesodist's vote is discarded. If you're going to vote for your boy atleast break down every bar and make it believable that you're not riding.
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Post by Arvincible »

i dont see whats wrong with jesodist's vote...i mean its obvious dickriding but there arent any cats, the only way id accept his vote is if i realized how dumb he was...and i guess ive already known this lol






anyways

timeline i feel like u can get better so im gonna break ur verse down like crazy. if u dont understand the difference between constructive criticism and hate then im definately gonna believe u were not educated enough in elementary and middle school...


The race starts, Mark starts sprinting, and I start a
slow jog...
Magic puts 100% effort, I put 40%, and he still
gets the loss!!!

^^^i dont understand why u press enter and drop to the next line at random times, ur structure is important cuz it effects ur flow, one bar is short then the next bar is dragged, its hard to fucking catch ur rhythm. u had something going on this bar but ur delivery was really bad so the punch wasnt that hard.

Well rip that patch, get trapped,locked, and
hatched you bring attacks, but collapsed because you simply cant rap...
Your paying for your votes because in reality, No ones
got this Dudes back!!!

^^^here i cant even distinguish where ur bar ends, u dragged too much for the length of 2 bars...ur punch lacks creativity and this cant be a personal unless u really knew the dude in person... it doesnt make any sense either how u say ull "rip that patch...then get strapped, locked, and hatched" and not only that u add "you bring attacks" right after that...it sounds funny if u read it aloud too..its just poor structure



Your Colder then cold, I'm experiencing your verse, but
remaining unfroze...
Im hotter then hot, and it shows, I got coals, that
glow from my clothes...

^^^you have coals that glow from ur clothes? wtf dude is that even attacking ur opponent? is it even complimenting u? and u call him colder than cold...is that a good thing? u need more relevance in what u write, u make urself look dumb with bars like this..


The epidemic is exposed, now widespread disease is
known,i got ur doors close, catch the 'G virus
like a cold,then i come bold, destroying this virus cuz im the
antidote...
Im a anti-joke, evaporating all fluids from the
line,Now your joke is gone and i can say your humors
dry...

^^^ok u were half relevant here, but whats having his "door closed" got anything to do with a virus? and whats the G virus? and why would you destroy it? so are u saying because ur the "antidote" it doesnt make u a 'G?

If your tired of losing timeline, i suggest you put more work into what u write, i took 20 minutes out of my life to tell u that u should take your shit more seriously, its not fun losing, and losses dont prove u have any support or skill, wins and respect do and ur not getting either if u dont work for it.



ok heres mark's break down



imma beast n' he a poodle, my worst would prolly rape his best
with those addresses..you the 'rain man'.. cause you retarded n' aint makin' sense


^^^decent opener, a little weak on the punch but it made a lot of sense...
"my worse would prolly rape his best" was the harder hitting part of the bar


faggot, i'll end ya too... im bendin' dude.. like a sick appendix do..
Why so many contact details bro? people want you the ta FUCK OFF THE SITE, so who'd wanna be friends wit you???...


^^^very witty personal haha kinda hurtful good multis, nice flow


you came alright, like ya bent queer's erection, but my spears'll wreck ya
A poll in this battle?... Timeline aint gettin' votes... like George Bush in THIS years elections!..


lol funny how u said "alright" haha nice wordplay dickhead, nice
meta and personal putting the votes together, a little too much dots on the bar though, kinda kills the flow sometimes



why you wanna battle the best? you weak son, OF COURSE YOU'LL GET TORN
imma a cool dude.. but this cat look like an osama bin laden's kid, abortion gone wrong..


^^^"went" wrong wouldve sounded better, but either way the end rhymes were really forced!! nice personal but because of the rhyme retardation poor sentence structure this bar was ur weakest.


i'll cut ya words short like the style of your verse, imma wind up this beef
cause we all know "time's as fake as they come" like peeps sellin' rolex's on the side of the street....


^^^ur switch from his verse to winding up the beed was bad, but this was the best nameplay in the entire battle. way to close.


Time line, what u need to realize is u need creativity and harder hitting punches and personals, do u not know what kind of aspects that people look for in a verse to see if its good or not? and know that mark is a good battler, and he murdered you with punches, creativity, flow, multis, pretty much everything in every aspect, so u have to learn to judge ur opponent before keyin up something. get better dude

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Post by Omega Bill »

It's up to Magic if he wants the vote too stand.
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Post by MagicMark »

lol.. if jeso pops his head in here again.. and says he wants his vote to stand... then by all means it can stand...

i aint losin' it, either way lol..

thanks for the breakdown arv... i know this wernt my best, kinda rushed the wording, LOL at 'alright' - didnt even realise lol.. cheers

so.. 1-0...magic..

on jeso's future say- so 1-1..
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Post by Brah-Vo »

votes say 5-1 in the poll...

Vote: Magic Mark.
No need to break it down. Take it or leave it.

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Post by The Gonz »

I voted Timeline because he didn't post any pictures.

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Post by Kurse »

If there were cats, this would be an obvious cat sweep.
But none the less Mark outshines TimeLine heavily in all aspects of the verse.
Overall Vote: Magic Mark

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Post by TreTru »

The race starts, Mark starts sprinting, and I start a
slow jog...
Magic puts 100% effort, I put 40%, and he still
gets the loss!!!


^^^aight concept but single rhymed ^^^^^^^^
Well rip that patch, get trapped,locked, and
hatched you bring attacks, but collapsed because you simply cant rap...
Your paying for your votes because in reality, No ones
got this Dudes back!!!

^^^^^^^major filler to start with concepts out the window though..
good try for a personal on da end stucture is bad tho............^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Your Colder then cold, I'm experiencing your verse, but
remaining unfroze...
Im hotter then hot, and it shows, I got coals, that
glow from my clothes...

^^^^^^the colder part seems like a good setup but the hotter than hot's kinda cheese and the glow from my clothes dont make sense^^^^


The epidemic is exposed, now widespread disease is
known,i got ur doors close, catch the 'G virus
like a cold,then i come bold, destroying this virus cuz im the
antidote...

^^^me and my homies call this a run on cuz it's runnin away..structure
is bad.. ^^^^^^^^^^


Im a anti-joke, evaporating all fluids from the
line,Now your joke is gone and i can say your humors
dry...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^not a very strong closer..^^^^^^^


Mark

imma beast n' he a poodle, my worst would prolly rape his best
with those addresses..you the 'rain man'.. cause you retarded n' aint makin' sense
^^^^^good opener nice punch...a lil stretched tho^^^^^^

faggot, i'll end ya too... im bendin' dude.. like a sick appendix do..
Why so many contact details bro? people want you the ta FUCK OFF THE SITE, so who'd wanna be friends wit you???...

^^^^haha nice personal...^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

you came alright, like ya bent queer's erection, but my spears'll wreck ya
A poll in this battle?... Timeline aint gettin' votes... like George Bush in THIS years elections!..


^^^awww shyt haha funny dude^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
why you wanna battle the best? you weak son, OF COURSE YOU'LL GET TORN
imma a cool dude.. but this cat look like an osama bin laden's kid, abortion gone wrong..

^^^uhh single rhymin good concept decent punch^^^^^^^^^

i'll cut ya words short like the style of your verse, imma wind up this beef
cause we all know "time's as fake as they come" like peeps sellin' rolex's on the side of the street....

^^^^^^^^^^^^yeah nice closer....that's a wrap^^^^^^^^^^^



no cats available but wouldve been a sweep IMO
my vote's for mark...

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