Bars of hell - 16

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MesaR
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Bars of hell - 16

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40-bars-of-death-vt25807.html
cyan-epilogue-vt25824.html#p191958

I've been on this site since the ages, haven't been here in a while some might remember me as Sequence, anyways a 16 liner i wrote and recorded the same day, uh


http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=26l2NaYZO4U
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Nice flow, good lyrics, I won't count the accent as a negative because that's something you can't help, this would sound ill to english cats, stay at it.
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Hey man, thanks for the feed.

Well .. you're bringing a lot of energy to this thing ... the timing is decent ... so your pretty pissed off ... Only got one verse here ... always nice to here a complete song ... If I were you ... I'd sit on the thing ... Knock out another verse and hook ... then post ... The quality seemed OK ... Level seemed good.

Stretch it out.
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i agree wit wat cyan said u need 2 strech this out i like tha verse but it b better wit a catchy hook n a verse or 2 more nice drop keep it up
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