"If I Only Knew"

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Rek
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"If I Only Knew"

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[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UXn4guMHC0Q[/video]

I'd love to get some serious feedback

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Re: "If I Only Knew"

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i just used a life and death production beat...lol
like the flow, i be honest the delivery sounds a little different
and the highs sound too high, hook sounds pretty dope. mixing on the hook was done better than the verses it sounds like. the lyrics are nice but think the volume was a bit loud and some ups and downs in the rhymes but the storys deep and i can vibe to this, good shit mang, stay up active and return feedback, yadamean
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Re: "If I Only Knew"

Post by Tha Dark Prince »

yeah this some good shit, i felt it started a bit awkward at first to be honest in regards of the whole sound, delivery and flow imo, but that 2nd n 3rd verse i was feeling, vibe was right, hook came out good n on total this a good track

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thanks

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Re: "If I Only Knew"

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The beat is sick man, i like the flow and delivery you are bringing.. i think you should as some ad-lips or maybe double up on your vocals, they sound kinda plan, im liking the hook man, dont know if it came with the beat but its tight, mixing was ok, the level to your vocals and the hook was different if you could level those out it would sound a bit cleaner.. over all man its good.. welcome to illest
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Re: "If I Only Knew"

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Deff like the vibe you're bringing, but really bro, watch that delivery. It's really...throwing me off, feels like you're forcing things. The mixing on the chorus is fucking perfect. IDK if you did it, or if the original producer of the beat did it, but yeah. Emotion is deep and strong. That's the most prominent thing you want in a song like this, everything else would be just like the proverbial cherry on top. 3rd verse is, IMO, your best. Although it felt extra short, I liked it the most. You upped your vocab and multi's off those words, and I enjoyed it. Overall, a decent listen, just put more focus into your delivery so that you're not forcing fast lines with slow ones all the time.
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