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[soundclick]11118510[/soundclick]



can't sing but had fun with it either way lett me know what yall think and thanks in advance
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Re: day dreaming

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Was going to give you some feed bro, but it says 'error loading song file'.
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Re: day dreaming

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hmmm let me see if i can fix that...

-- Sun Oct 09, 2011 10:50 am --

i am sorry it won't let me put the player up for some reason i tried to edit like 15 times... thats why the link is up now


::EDITTT:: player should now work
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Re: day dreaming

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had to turn the speakers louder than normal, odd.

Doesn't sound bad, not a fan of effects on singing though.

So, your name has "ent" so am i assuming this "isnt you". So, that being said, the rap, is pretty cool. On point for the most part, sounds really weird to be honest. an effect or the way the dubs ride it, just odd. There is a lot going on with the beat, effects, so its hard for me to focus on what the rapper is saying. Not bad overall, but something sounds weird.
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nah it is me ent is juss the other things i do as well


thanks for the feed


and i don't believe i did nearly anything to my voice on the hook but i forgot to be honest lol
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Re: day dreaming

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im listenin on the laptop...

haha ..well it was a good try on da hook...uhh thehook after the verse sounded a lil better than the first hook..

the verse was easy money im feelin the flo its on point didnt hear any slips or anything..i like the fact your tryin to do mainstream type a songs..props..

anyhow this wasnt as good as the other one i peeped from ya imo...but, def nothin to be ashamed of ...keep doin ya thing playuh..

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good looks bro thanks for the feed


yeah this was my first song in a while i got a few new tracks on the way
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Nice bruh..lmk when u drop em
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no worries dude they'll be on here i actually have a few cats commin over tonight to my studio to do some recording and i got a mixtape i gotta record for someone in my studio...


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i thought it was ok, it had a main stream kinda sound too it... i thought the mixing was well done... but i suck at mixing so i never really disect that lyrics was ok though nothing over the top but they flowed well with the beat... thumbs up mayn... keep up
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Re: day dreaming

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hook...............um...lets move on.

beat is fresh.

lyrics are on point man. like i mentioned, you would of been good for the tourny. you have a great delivery, with nice control. you deliver pretty damn confident. pretty nice material here. i think, maybe just a different delivery on the hook would actually make this into an easier listen. cus like, the verses are solid no doubt, but, the hook takes away from it. either have someone with a lil more experience knock it out, or mess with it till it sounds clean and flush. i definately will give you respect for trying tho cus i find myself doin the same thing. nice piece man. good to have talent like yours on the site.
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Re: day dreaming

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thanks guys and yes i know i need work on the singing lol that i have established lmfaooo hahaa
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