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Phobias

Post by Defiance » Tue Oct 04, 2011 1:57 am

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My major phobias being a failure... and family sorrows.. and depression
a song i made for an audio topical that the other guy quit on
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Re: Phobias

Post by Quix » Tue Oct 04, 2011 1:59 am

i'll peep this when i get home mah dude!!


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Re: Phobias

Post by Mic S » Tue Oct 04, 2011 5:18 am

I feel like u nailed it wit lyrics

but i really wish you put heart and emotion behind this type of track... If your gonna spill your heart out like this you really gotta put the emotion behind it so people can relate to what your saying a lot more

i feel like ya voice seemed forced.. but yea emotion woulda polished this off

with that being said ..

its a decent track. btw beat is dope.. if u dont mind would u send it my way :whistle:

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Re: Phobias

Post by FlipSide » Wed Oct 05, 2011 9:34 am

Dope beat...gritty flow...ur voice different too... I agree with the emotion..keep that in mind when you redo it.....like the hook too

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Re: Phobias

Post by Defiance » Thu Oct 06, 2011 2:50 am

thanks flip an Mic s still upping
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Post by Kuhlerblynd » Sat Oct 08, 2011 12:51 am

I like the beat. I feel like you flow really well with this. Some of your background vocals are slightly off from your foreground vocals. I wasnt feeling the chorus. Honestly, its not anything you did, Im just not liking the way its delivered. I really like your lyrics in this. The second verse seems to get a bit quiet in some spots, and your flow seems to get choppy somewhere in the middle, toard the end of that verse. Overall, I enjoyed this. The lyrics were on point, and I could relate to alot of what you were bringing to the table in this joint. Keep it going man! Ready to hear some more from you!
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Re: Phobias

Post by Loon E Lou » Sat Oct 08, 2011 5:54 am

okkkkkkk. i like the pace you kept on this. makes you sound a WHOLE lot more confident with your lyrics. the emotion is just right for sumtn like this. nothing too crazy. the hook had some potential, with better mixing on it. you could of made it sound alot better. mixing wise. yea man im really diggin your delivery on this. the flow almost seems flawless. a couple little times where you could of delivered it different for a better listen.

the mixing was ok. your verses were mixed nice. your getting better at it for sure. your seconds and adlibs were maybe a notch too high. lower it just a bit to get that nice mesh sound between all your takes. that way your main isnt overpowered by your other tracks.

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Re: Phobias

Post by CBK » Sat Oct 08, 2011 5:56 am

i'll be honest this aint my style of rap but i dig it

flow was dope over a track that i dont really appreciate
an if it weren't for such good delivery an flow i would have turned this off . no offence.

the topic was a dope one an you adhered to it throughout
with relevant lyrics and an emotional style of delivery
i dont do audio myself an have no real knowledge of beat making an producing but i feel with a better track selection this would have been epic.

(although i did like the ....fear itself intro) that was an appropriate quote/statement to add relevancy to a phobia track overall dope post man

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Re: Phobias

Post by Sir Kevin O Shea » Sat Oct 08, 2011 6:40 am

The lyrics are the strong point of the song. The song itself didn't hit like it should have. It really didn't have enough emotion.
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Re: Phobias

Post by Defiance » Sat Oct 08, 2011 6:42 am

feel ya.. i plan to redue it.. couldn't catch my breath the whole time.. so ima redue it with more emphasis on my vocals.. and a better mix


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Re: Phobias

Post by blindeyeent » Sun Oct 09, 2011 5:32 am

you seem like you are VERY angry and the adlibs with the high voice is a tiny weird.. lyrics are great kinda wish you put the right emotion in it instead of sounding like you were extra pissed

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Re: Phobias

Post by TreTru » Mon Oct 10, 2011 7:03 am

Aighth Lemme get @ this...

Intro is Nice...

okay?...haha..wow way to step it up bro...this is soundin way better qual/mixxing then the last i heard from ya...

Im feelin this Beat..once you start the verse the scheme and Chords U'r using bring a lil more life to da beat...

i actually like what ya tryin to do with that harmony track its almost thurr.. i thnk now that i keep listenin i think it sounds like ya harmonys too loud a bit maybe clippin out before da mixx..maybe?

Hook needs some help tho bruh imo..srry you should fixx it tho cuz this song right here is a Good One

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Re: Phobias

Post by Cyan » Sat Oct 15, 2011 2:58 am

Right out the gate I'm reminded of Twizted. and I like their delivery ... you've even got a type of beat that they'd gravitate towards ... and the ICP'ish intro.

This hook is pretty bizarre man ... a little jarring and hard to follow ... I don't think that high pitched cartoon thing fits on this beat.

One thing you've got figured out is timing. I mean your like a snare drum pop pop pop right on beat but you're kinda being a slave to it. Every once in awhile it's OK to go a little long or short ... or fall off for a moment as long as you get back on. So ... you're mechanics are there but it's coming off a bit mechanical .. if you know what I'm saying.

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Re: Phobias

Post by The Architect » Sat Oct 15, 2011 3:07 am

flow was on point but the vocals just wasn't feelin it, beat was koo, i disliked the female dubs a lot, i almost never enjoy when a male and female dub on a track unless its in sync
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Re: Phobias

Post by lyrical1 » Mon Oct 31, 2011 1:32 am

unique approach vocally, like the lyrics though, keep em comin


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