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Circle the Sun

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this is just some Tru shit ....

First verse Me

Second Verse Petrafne..

Just a preview from our next mixxtape..its not fully
mixxed but you should get the idea...enjoy

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Circle the Sun

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/elmo- ... ml#p163378

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/sentu ... ml#p163379

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Re: Circle the Sun

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Pretty good song. I didn't think your vocals stood out from the beat enough though. You had a pretty solid flow though and some pretty good lyrics. Keep at it
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Re: Circle the Sun

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i liked the chorus........lyrically i think you could have done way more
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I like this homie, nice emotion, kept me listening for sure. Nice production
I guess vocals could have been turned up a bit but thats just a matter of opinion. sounds like you know what your doin. Nice drop homie
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Re: Circle the Sun

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yea just tweak the eq a lil, but I like the lyrics and the flow...u have nice presence, I would switch up the emotion in the voice, so pitch or intensity depending on what u are trying to convey, cuz the emotion is too similar throughout, but i like the hook, nice drop man..
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Re: Circle the Sun

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Thanks for the feed Guys..ill return when i can..

and you got a point about the vocalz..ill give it a few more lil tweaks before finalizin..i been gettin antsy cuz its murder singin the same 18 songs @ da shows to push da album..hahaha...but yeah im juss leakin some onto
illest cuz it helped us step our game up bak in da day..

@Yezzir i been thinkin bout it....were about to take some time off soon to prep our next album so maybe if theres somebody worthy...i dont want another repeat of Furious aka Joey Piff...hahaha..
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thanks for the feed Yroc ... lmao @ ya avy ..
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Re: Circle the Sun

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Wow cant believe this dont have more feed. Nice track. Love the production. Thought the lyrics were nice. You rode this pretty good and it has a pretty dope meaning. Overally, dope track.
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Re: Circle the Sun

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Yeah, I thought the whole sound of this was really tight man. The flow was on point. I liked the emotion and the delivery, and the hook. I actually liked the beat alot. This goes hard fam.
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nice concept and delivery.... id like to hear some more of ur shit bro.. maybe even do a collabe if u like... up to u
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This is sick, has every quality of a good song, the beat is hell catchy. the hook is cool too, and i thought the verses were good lyrically and flow wise. good shit
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Re: Circle the Sun

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Yeah this shit was dope none the less, so dope made me actually want to leave feed on it after being incredibly lazy n shit, but yeah the beat was catchy from the get go, your hook really topped that off, and the verses were good shit with the flow and lyrically, both of your mixtapes were dope and it seems you are only progressing, keep the track flowing
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Re: Circle the Sun

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ayy thanks 2 everyone for the feed..this is just another one for our next album..wich should be done around october or so..this isn't a final mixx so it's cool if the mixxing doesnt jive with whaut you like..plz keep feeding...

oh and btw leave me links so i can return the feed!!!
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Re: Circle the Sun

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Hmm...


This Beat Was Hard.. I Would Kill This Shit.. lol.. Tha Hook Was Ok.

Your Verse Was Pretty Good..Vocals Didnt Match That Beat.. It Went Well Wit tha Second Guy Tho.. I Fucks Wit Cuz It Remind Me Of Them Texas Boi's Ya Dig..

I Would Say Try To Chop N Screw It.. It'll Sound Like Some UGK Shit..


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Re: Circle the Sun

Post by Ted Bundey »

i loved the chorus and your verse was dope.
the flow was and beat were hot. looking forward to your next drop
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