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by CrazyPete
Thu Oct 27, 2011 10:36 pm
Forum: Written Rhymes
Topic: Escaping From Hell
Replies: 7
Views: 554

Re: Escaping From Hell

Wow. Complex but flowed very smooth. I actually bust out in chuckles at the cleverness of the multies. The story itself (more of a snapshot I guess) was powerful and really enjoyable to read. Again, wow.
by CrazyPete
Thu Oct 27, 2011 3:32 am
Forum: The Poet's Stage
Topic: Less is More
Replies: 13
Views: 1163

Re: Less is More

I don't like it. Why? Two reasons.

1. I don't understand it. I cannot find the paradoxes.
2. It makes me feel dumb (see #1).

Well, I may not be too bright but at least I'm good looking. Or at least I claim to be.
by CrazyPete
Tue Oct 25, 2011 2:57 am
Forum: Written Rhymes
Topic: Free Flow
Replies: 7
Views: 514

Re: Free Flow

There may be no specific content, but definitely have a theme (and one of which I approve). Great flow, I can hear the beat in my head while I read it...

If this is you with writers block then I definitely need to check out what you did before.
by CrazyPete
Tue Oct 25, 2011 2:44 am
Forum: The Poet's Stage
Topic: My Entire World
Replies: 7
Views: 788

Re: My Entire World

Very raw. Could use a little more polish (though you may already know that) but then sometimes polishing something too much takes away from the urgency and emotion, both of which come through well. I think too that the intensity of the piece does help one to empathize, which is both rare and importa...
by CrazyPete
Sun Oct 23, 2011 6:32 am
Forum: Written Rhymes
Topic: The Royal We
Replies: 4
Views: 375

Re: The Royal We

Thanks a lot to both of you for the feed. I think it does need some more WOW factors, but at least I have some amount of flow which I guess is a good place to start.
by CrazyPete
Sat Oct 22, 2011 5:21 am
Forum: Written Rhymes
Topic: The Royal We
Replies: 4
Views: 375

The Royal We

So no one thought much of my first couple of posts. That’s OK, I revel in mediocrity (although I do have a hard shell so telling me what I’m doing wrong is ok). Anyway, let’s try something a little sillier… Bring broke beats and we’ll bring back bodies With bandwidth booming and parity to party Fres...
by CrazyPete
Fri Oct 21, 2011 2:58 am
Forum: The Poet's Stage
Topic: Chemist's Lament
Replies: 2
Views: 471

Re: Chemist's Lament

Wow. That's crazy. Never really got much feedback from that site, so I thought I'd post it here. I cannot believe that you actually caught a 7 year old cross post.

What are you, some genius or something?
by CrazyPete
Mon Oct 17, 2011 5:40 am
Forum: The Poet's Stage
Topic: Chemist's Lament
Replies: 2
Views: 471

Chemist's Lament

Solvents boil, pions toil on distillations wraped in foil columns long of silicon give seperations for the calm and patient folk beneath the yolk all the while we stand to stoke enthalpatic fires for entropic mires where selectivity corrodes! expires! but don't dispair, purge of air and replace with...
by CrazyPete
Mon Oct 17, 2011 12:31 am
Forum: Written Rhymes
Topic: Puruit
Replies: 0
Views: 171

Puruit

<t>Sorry to post two back to back, but I think the first was pretty weak. This one may be a little better, but then I'm new to this so I may be off base...<br/> <br/> Keep moving, but always tread light<br/> imprints on the ground lead to enemies sight<br/> & thought...are they following me?<br/...
by CrazyPete
Sun Oct 16, 2011 11:07 pm
Forum: Written Rhymes
Topic: Insomina Again
Replies: 0
Views: 194

Insomina Again

First post, here we go... I'm hold up im my keep Trying to get some sleep I hear something down below; some punk trying to creep? Check: nothing, back to bed Need to fix this head Up or down on the meds? Not enough water with the lead? From the pipes down the well & even deeper do they dwell these r...

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