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by Deception
Wed Jul 27, 2011 9:41 am
Forum: Written Rhymes
Topic: *uc* You
Replies: 7
Views: 956

Re: *uc* You

Not bad, raw emotion was there try to increase line length with more content, try using basic imagery to pull the reader in, also spell check drops I'm not a good with grammar infact I'm dyslexic but spelling mistakes fuck up the flow and throw readers off, just a heads up Peace [ Post made via iPod...
by Deception
Wed Jul 27, 2011 8:53 am
Forum: Illest Topical Tournament 2011
Topic: 3rd String QB vs Deception (1st Round)
Replies: 3
Views: 891

Re: 3rd String QB vs Deception (1st Round)

Check

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by Deception
Mon Jul 25, 2011 12:25 am
Forum: Illest Topical Tournament 2011
Topic: Topical Battle Royale Preliminary
Replies: 13
Views: 2061

Re: Topical Battle Royale Preliminary

ima give my vote to QB, i dont have time to explain realy but im sure the above have explained enough, i enjoyed his verse the best. Potassium solutions as answers to my criminal selections in question after a last meal and undressing im tied down as they reveal the final lesson I found a form of pr...
by Deception
Fri Jul 22, 2011 9:30 am
Forum: Illest Topical Tournament 2011
Topic: Topical Battle Royale Preliminary
Replies: 13
Views: 2061

Re: Topical Battle Royale Preliminary

Through wicked times came my pain, one to scorch souls A burn uncompromised by the rain drops spitting in horse blows If I knew then what I know now, id be better in disguise Wouldn't let them take me to genocide for like Anne I'd hide Never too be found, off the radar, special forces wouldn't find ...
by Deception
Thu Jul 21, 2011 1:47 am
Forum: Illest Topical Tournament 2011
Topic: Topical Text Tournament (SIGN UPS)
Replies: 23
Views: 2417

Re: Topical Text Tournament (SIGN UPS)

in, how i link this to aim so my pms will get emails sent to my fone?
by Deception
Mon Jul 04, 2011 8:10 am
Forum: Callout Section
Topic: Open call
Replies: 4
Views: 530

Open call

Well I'm trying to elevate so ten lines due tuesday as I have work tomorrow

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by Deception
Mon Jul 04, 2011 7:53 am
Forum: The Poet's Stage
Topic: Free Flowing Poetry 2
Replies: 13
Views: 2044

Re: Free Flowing Poetry 2

If those legs are in fact painted on
Where did you find paint that doesn’t run?

that was dope.... no realy it was, so was the whole peice but i felt this part more creative. but props keep doing your thing.
by Deception
Mon Jul 04, 2011 7:50 am
Forum: Cyphers
Topic: alphabetical cypher
Replies: 15
Views: 2465

Re: alphabetical cypher

Alphabetical Assonance's Amazing
Aranging A's As Aim After Awaking

is that what you mean
by Deception
Mon Jul 04, 2011 7:46 am
Forum: The Lounge
Topic: SENDING PM's OF YOUR BATTLE VERSE?!?!?
Replies: 15
Views: 1726

Re: SENDING PM's OF YOUR BATTLE VERSE?!?!?

i thinks it a good idea tbh, if people are going to elevate then surely they will take more time to write, try and think things out, then post. after the battle if they want to know what there doing wrong they could ask someone what they need to focus on. instead of someone going change this that an...
by Deception
Mon Jul 04, 2011 7:36 am
Forum: Written Rhymes
Topic: Birth Of K Panda
Replies: 13
Views: 1265

Re: Birth Of K Panda

The smell is irritant, sounds of eeriness in increments, I'm alone, completely lost The feeling of death is imminent, keeping me vigilant, an immigrant but at what cost? i think the assonance in this bar was too strong, the rhyming of slightly forced words made it drag along as most of these word ar...
by Deception
Wed Apr 06, 2011 7:39 am
Forum: Written Rhymes
Topic: bench lol
Replies: 2
Views: 449

Re: bench lol

thanks for the feed def
by Deception
Wed Apr 06, 2011 7:24 am
Forum: Written Rhymes
Topic: Talkin God......Angry
Replies: 6
Views: 828

Re: Talkin God......Angry

nice deep drop man, the second religous peice since ive been back lol, but nice work look forward to seing your next piece and see if you can switch it up a little
by Deception
Wed Apr 06, 2011 7:21 am
Forum: Written Rhymes
Topic: A Hole In The Confessional Booth (REVISED, READ ME!!!)
Replies: 5
Views: 835

Re: A Hole In The Confessional Booth

Or somewhere else... I can easily prove their system fails Point to the "stars in the dark night" & watch every 'Christian Bail' The Reverend runs, no Adidas.. conversations starting up Got me asking "did Tsunami victims not pray hard enough?" nice few lines Do ya lie? Raise em' in a world that's co...
by Deception
Wed Apr 06, 2011 7:00 am
Forum: Written Rhymes
Topic: bench lol
Replies: 2
Views: 449

bench lol

incase of confusion this was written for the NWL, the topic was a pretty bland picture of a bench ill try insert picture if i can. http://i73.photobucket.com/albums/i233/Ryan_B_2k6/hx9qtc.jpg I’ve walked this lane before, a place where trees are bare and wind is low a scarce land, inhabited by these...
by Deception
Mon Mar 14, 2011 5:19 am
Forum: Illest Suggestions
Topic: Illestlyrics iphone app??
Replies: 10
Views: 1830

Re: Illestlyrics iphone app??

problem is you need apple developing suite(or wateva its called)then you need to programe the app probs with xml in c++ or with a unique apple writing code.

i think the suite cost money aswell, to do it for driod i dont no how to do but windows 7 phone has some software to programe apps in c+

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