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- Sat Jun 18, 2011 3:13 am
- Forum: The Poet's Stage
- Topic: Freestyle spoken word
- Replies: 5
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I dunno, I'm kind of unsure on this one. I reread several times to try to unearth what it meant to me or possibly, what you were trying to say. All I can say is that I did pick up that there are some ironies here.
Well, if this had another title I might have been compelled to call it uneven and disjointed ramblings but, your title encompasses what this truly is; a glimpse into the mind of a young man in his early stages of adulthood.
I see you setting the concept up and everything but the execution is where this one lacked, IMO. Bars 3 & 4 seem outta place, contrived. And then the next 4 bars after that seem like they were just devoted to spittin with no apparant connection to the opener. And then you kinda just ended on an "ehh...
This was a pretty decent drop. I think you def captured the mood of a confused soul. It flowed nicely from the start but the rhyme seemed to just hit a wall here: I feel pressured into changin' who my soul once was I'm pushing my limits plus I ain't seen a good relationship in a minute From there it...
What up IL! I used to be on a site called Abyss awhile ago, it died. This is one of the few sites I've come across in the time since that really impressed me in quality and creativity. The forums def remind me of Abyss. I already read a few posts and the moniker fits. I'll prolly be most active in t...